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There is a common sensibility of abuse in your stories. I find that sad, not erotic. You are technically a solid writer.

Thanks for the feedback and compliment. I understand what you are saying, but you must remember that maybe extreme abuse is what turns me on, and it might not be your cup of tea. Everyone has their own fetishes and tastes and rightfully so.

The abuse part was awesome! The best part was the end.

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I just have to comment. In my real life, when I was 18-years old, I was practically forced to go on a date with a man of Indian decent. I am Caucasian.

He would not listen to the word "no". I was shocked. He drove me to a drive-in, and then he proceeded to molest me. After being in a relationship with him for 11- days, I did not know how to get rid of him. I literally ran away from him. The reason I had to "run" was because he said to me, "If I ever find you with another man, I will kill you both. Him first, while I make you watch, and then I will kill you!"

I live in North America, not India. Men from India are very controlling.
It was a terrible 11-days of my life. Everything happened so quickly. He was a taxi cab driver. I wanted him to drive me home, but we ended up at a drive-in theatre instead. Being as young as I was, I did not know how to be more forceful and demand him to drive me home.

I shudder every time I read a story where a character is a man of Indian decent. What I have typed here is all true. It really did happen to me.

Assumptions

I am sorry that happened to you in real life. But be careful what you assume and make stereotypes about from my stories. I am Indian but the man in my fantasies is Caucasian. Plus, my stories are pure fantasy.

Good style in the writing - but very sad story

I am grateful, that this story is only an fantasy.
The end is especially sad. I would have liked it, if he had made only one gentle gesture.
I for myself have very etreme fantasies, so I can understand your inrention. But why not end such a harsh punishment with a smile an a bit of tenderness?
Please pardon the failures in my comment. I know: My englisch is not perfect.

Bianca