I enjoyed the fact that you let the mother's age show. That is uncommonly intelligent. The "My mom was forty but looked twenty" crap is way overused for this category. With that part very, very good job. Dialog was also good...but not great. Work on that, get it to flow better, easier, smoother.
Critique: This was a clever idea. One that could have been built to much greater heights of pleasure and heat. There is no need to rush. A bit of dialog before the "Talk" would have been nice to maybe help establish the two main characters better.
The boat ride making her horny was a very good idea. Now imagine it not immediately taking her to orgasm, but instead every paddle-boat, jet ski, speedboat...ferry ride, whatever building that feeling of helpless-to-stop-it arousal. Maybe he hears her masturbating over and over, at night, frustratingly unable to satisfy her needs herself. That builds sexual heat in him as well. Till finally on the last ride together she breaks down and starts crying...because she is so horny it's painful. She begs him to "forgive her". To "not look", and she begins to play with herself there on the boat.
He does as she asks but her low moans get the better of him and he starts to watch. She sees this and even embarrassed being watched by him adds to what she is feeling. When he adjust himself because he's so hard it turns her on even more. This lead to them both masturbating while the other watches.
When they are done she is terribly embarrassed. Doesn't say anything. They get back to the dock and she is still horny.
"Mom, I'm sorry." him.
"It's all right...I didn't mind." her.
"You didn't?" him.
"No. Could we...could we go back out for another ride?" her.
See, same story but the sexual heat built slowly, and will be all the hotter for that time spent. To get a mother to drop her "Shall-never-do's" and do something so uninhibited as incest, the sexual heat needs to be overpowering.Blisteringly so. Write that into your stories and your fans will love you for it.
My opinion, worth what it's worth.
MST
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Anonymous03/08/15
Very interesting and very arousing to say the least ! I don't think other stories on here brought out such a different but clever and HOT idea ...
I think Mom and son now need to go to the next level and share what they started. It could really cause his Mom to experience things she never has according to the story. Its a perfect situation and he can teach her different sexual things and I am sure she can teach him things too. Win-win.
by
Anonymous03/08/15
good ride beter than a vibraterfor mom
your stories are always hot so keep on trucking give us more on their resort adventure,tenbears43
by
Anonymous03/08/15
see sickness
I read many a story of mother and son fucking. The problem was that the mother had forty double D tits. This one did not.
The writer had the son state that his mother was 45 years old and looked 45; not 25 as in many other stories. I loved this.
I'm glad that the mother wanted to have more sex with her son. No mention of having his child. Not necessary.
Waiting for more.
What a hot little story. Really enjoed it. Need to jerk off now.
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Anonymous03/08/15
a new story by HeyAll sends a jolt of pleasure through thousands of readers--no hypnotist necessary
A whacky scenario, but a very exciting story of hot motherfucking. When the son gets his first look at the beautiful hole between his mother's legs, the same hole he came out of, he's stunned. Mom says, smiling, "What's the matter? Looks like you've found something you like." He sure as fuck has. It's the best thing a boy can ever see--his own mother's cunt. And it makes the guy's so hard he's about to splatter his sperm all over the place. Mom's got a much better idea. So he slides his big hard cock up his mother's warm wet twat, up his own damn birth canal up to his balls, and gives his mommy the hot incestuous fuck she craves. He thinks, "My cock was satisfying her needs." Oh, if only more moms understood that their boy has exactly what can satisfy their needs--it's right there between his legs, his hard young cock and his heavy loaded balls--it'd be a much happier world. This gifted author knows better than anyone else that a boy's penis and his precious semen belong up his own mommy's vagina. But, hey, Mr. HA, how about giving the son a name?
by
Anonymous03/09/15
BRAVISSIMO! VERY, VERY EROTIC. THE SCENARIO WAS BRILLIANTLY CONCEIVED. MOM IS HOT HOT HOT.
BRAVISSIMO!
5*
I totally agree with some comments: you hit the nail on the head when you described a 45 year old woman as looking her age but being very sexually attractive nevertheless.
I myself had hots for my mother but definitely not because she looked 20 when she was 45 (she did not!) For me, my mom's curves were the ideal of sexiness. And yes if you truly fancy your mother you find older women irresistibly appealing! I did.
Thank you, HeyAll! You are the best.
My mom would play around with other men than my father until she realized I could take very good care of her! She never went back to those other men and seldom needed my father who was running around on her anyway!
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Anonymous03/09/15
i'm glad you drilled in that it was the mother and didn't use a pronoun as an identifier, because I don't think we would have known who the protagonist was if you hadn't. Good writers don't need to use titles after the first introduction but I'm glad you did.
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Anonymous03/09/15
Good, fun story
Many sons will do whatever is asked to help mom. With a little effort they can enjoy each other at little expense.
Mom knows best way to go for a ride either by boat or by son. Keep more cuuummminng
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Anonymous03/10/15
Mom's always know what is best for her son.
A daughter's first love is her dad, and so it should be, a son's first love is his mom. Incest relationships, are more common then we realize.. Brother and sister is probably the most common of all. It has to be very difficult for a sister, and or brother, not to get sexually aroused, to see each other naked and almost naked on a daily basis. Pretty normal, as far as this commenter is concerned.
This story is one of the very few i have on my favorites and i hope you do a part to were the mother starts to have feeling for her son or vice versa and they end up getting together.
by
Anonymous03/16/15
Too fast
I have been reading your stories since long. I just felt, you were a bit hasty in the mother approaching her son.There was a need for better build up.
But an unique storyline nonetheless.
I didn't see any connection to April fool's day, but that didn't stop me from "enjoying" this story, if you know what I mean.
by
Anonymous04/06/15
She Didn't Sound Like A Beauty Queen - but Fucked Nice!
Now that was about as improper a story as I have ever read! I fucking loved it! I never thought twice about fucking MY mom - but there were some moms around when I was growing up in small town Nebraska who were truly cock-hardening babes who were probably dressing the way they did at home just wishing one of us local boy scouts would cum around and do our "good deed" for the day in their pussy.
There was one of those young moms that I always wished I had fucked!!!!! What a SWEEET pair of titties she had - and gorgeous legs that went all the way up to her pussy!
Keep these evil fucking mom and son stories "cumming" and I'll keep "cumming" reading them!
OMG! I was reading the story & was imagining me & my mom (*****)
:)
by
Anonymous06/11/15
A little far retched...
But nice & hot, nonetheless
by
Anonymous07/25/15
Ignore the moron who talks like a dog
Rover the idiot used the term retched? Sounds like a high school reject to me.
Story was very interesting, unique and imaginative. I bet the hypnotherapist also cured his own mother of sea sickness the same way. Which is why he did not undo his "mistake".
I will never look at a boat ride at Disneyland the same again.
Kudos to a great story. Would be even better if there were pics. :)
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Anonymous07/28/15
Lucky kid
The thought of a young kid being offered to make it with his own 45 y/o Mom on a boat, in a bikini no less? Well okay Mom, just hike up that skirt for me and lets get to it!!! A boy couldn't possibly cum any harder than when his delivers into his hot sexy Mom.
by
Anonymous09/19/15
Sex on a Boat
A unique story, not altogether logical but a fun read.
by
Anonymous11/15/15
wet and wild
Another great unusual schema for mom/son sex! I think that incest involving mothers and sons is the hottest and most fascinating kind of sex. I'm glad that you made the mom a real middle-aged mom who is still capable of arousing young men--not some still young parent who got pregnant at 16. This seems far more real--and far more satisfying. These are a pair who really love each other; wonderfully arousing and stimulating. I have just one quibble: now that they have brought each other to the best orgasms ever, do they really have to get back on a boat before they can do it again?
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Anonymous02/06/16
THE BOAT RIDE
WRITE A SEQUEL. LET THEM HAVE ALL THEY WANT! THE FILTHIER THE BETTER. FILL HER UP! LONG, WIDE, DEEP AND CONTINUOUSLY.
Mother it seems planned these five star boat rides and it can safely be assumed that sleeping beds changed to one bed for them to enjoy their own boat ride vibrations.
by
Anonymous06/26/16
so refreshing!
So refreshing! My cock was rock hard the whole time. Great tale.
English
Preposterous, I suggest, but great fun.
Enjoyed your story. Thanks
Great
Excellent story. Maybe do a part 2 which is much more intimate? Passionate?
Loved it. Very hot.
Good and yet...
I enjoyed the fact that you let the mother's age show. That is uncommonly intelligent. The "My mom was forty but looked twenty" crap is way overused for this category. With that part very, very good job. Dialog was also good...but not great. Work on that, get it to flow better, easier, smoother.
Critique: This was a clever idea. One that could have been built to much greater heights of pleasure and heat. There is no need to rush. A bit of dialog before the "Talk" would have been nice to maybe help establish the two main characters better.
The boat ride making her horny was a very good idea. Now imagine it not immediately taking her to orgasm, but instead every paddle-boat, jet ski, speedboat...ferry ride, whatever building that feeling of helpless-to-stop-it arousal. Maybe he hears her masturbating over and over, at night, frustratingly unable to satisfy her needs herself. That builds sexual heat in him as well. Till finally on the last ride together she breaks down and starts crying...because she is so horny it's painful. She begs him to "forgive her". To "not look", and she begins to play with herself there on the boat.
He does as she asks but her low moans get the better of him and he starts to watch. She sees this and even embarrassed being watched by him adds to what she is feeling. When he adjust himself because he's so hard it turns her on even more. This lead to them both masturbating while the other watches.
When they are done she is terribly embarrassed. Doesn't say anything. They get back to the dock and she is still horny.
"Mom, I'm sorry." him.
"It's all right...I didn't mind." her.
"You didn't?" him.
"No. Could we...could we go back out for another ride?" her.
See, same story but the sexual heat built slowly, and will be all the hotter for that time spent. To get a mother to drop her "Shall-never-do's" and do something so uninhibited as incest, the sexual heat needs to be overpowering.Blisteringly so. Write that into your stories and your fans will love you for it.
My opinion, worth what it's worth.
MST
Very interesting and very arousing to say the least ! I don't think other stories on here brought out such a different but clever and HOT idea ...
I think Mom and son now need to go to the next level and share what they started. It could really cause his Mom to experience things she never has according to the story. Its a perfect situation and he can teach her different sexual things and I am sure she can teach him things too. Win-win.
good ride beter than a vibraterfor mom
your stories are always hot so keep on trucking give us more on their resort adventure,tenbears43
see sickness
I read many a story of mother and son fucking. The problem was that the mother had forty double D tits. This one did not.
The writer had the son state that his mother was 45 years old and looked 45; not 25 as in many other stories. I loved this.
I'm glad that the mother wanted to have more sex with her son. No mention of having his child. Not necessary.
Waiting for more.
Hot
What a hot little story. Really enjoed it. Need to jerk off now.
a new story by HeyAll sends a jolt of pleasure through thousands of readers--no hypnotist necessary
A whacky scenario, but a very exciting story of hot motherfucking. When the son gets his first look at the beautiful hole between his mother's legs, the same hole he came out of, he's stunned. Mom says, smiling, "What's the matter? Looks like you've found something you like." He sure as fuck has. It's the best thing a boy can ever see--his own mother's cunt. And it makes the guy's so hard he's about to splatter his sperm all over the place. Mom's got a much better idea. So he slides his big hard cock up his mother's warm wet twat, up his own damn birth canal up to his balls, and gives his mommy the hot incestuous fuck she craves. He thinks, "My cock was satisfying her needs." Oh, if only more moms understood that their boy has exactly what can satisfy their needs--it's right there between his legs, his hard young cock and his heavy loaded balls--it'd be a much happier world. This gifted author knows better than anyone else that a boy's penis and his precious semen belong up his own mommy's vagina. But, hey, Mr. HA, how about giving the son a name?
BRAVISSIMO! VERY, VERY EROTIC. THE SCENARIO WAS BRILLIANTLY CONCEIVED. MOM IS HOT HOT HOT.
BRAVISSIMO!
5*
I totally agree with some comments: you hit the nail on the head when you described a 45 year old woman as looking her age but being very sexually attractive nevertheless.
I myself had hots for my mother but definitely not because she looked 20 when she was 45 (she did not!) For me, my mom's curves were the ideal of sexiness. And yes if you truly fancy your mother you find older women irresistibly appealing! I did.
Thank you, HeyAll! You are the best.
Thanks***
For the read.
Loved it
Loved it *****
Oh wow!!! Knock it out of the park...
Loved it.
rocking the boat never sounded so fun.
I think I need the name
of that hypnotist.
inside your mom is a great place to be!
My mom would play around with other men than my father until she realized I could take very good care of her! She never went back to those other men and seldom needed my father who was running around on her anyway!
i'm glad you drilled in that it was the mother and didn't use a pronoun as an identifier, because I don't think we would have known who the protagonist was if you hadn't. Good writers don't need to use titles after the first introduction but I'm glad you did.
Good, fun story
Many sons will do whatever is asked to help mom. With a little effort they can enjoy each other at little expense.
It was good of him to come to her assistance
and it was all in the aid of medical emergency.
Here to please
Mom knows best way to go for a ride either by boat or by son. Keep more cuuummminng
Mom's always know what is best for her son.
A daughter's first love is her dad, and so it should be, a son's first love is his mom. Incest relationships, are more common then we realize.. Brother and sister is probably the most common of all. It has to be very difficult for a sister, and or brother, not to get sexually aroused, to see each other naked and almost naked on a daily basis. Pretty normal, as far as this commenter is concerned.
Very nice story
This story is one of the very few i have on my favorites and i hope you do a part to were the mother starts to have feeling for her son or vice versa and they end up getting together.
Too fast
I have been reading your stories since long. I just felt, you were a bit hasty in the mother approaching her son.There was a need for better build up.
But an unique storyline nonetheless.
Maybe it will dawn on them that they can get the same sexual feelings in a bed.
If there is a second part maybe they will have figured it out.
*****
Very hawt!
I didn't see any connection to April fool's day, but that didn't stop me from "enjoying" this story, if you know what I mean.
She Didn't Sound Like A Beauty Queen - but Fucked Nice!
Now that was about as improper a story as I have ever read! I fucking loved it! I never thought twice about fucking MY mom - but there were some moms around when I was growing up in small town Nebraska who were truly cock-hardening babes who were probably dressing the way they did at home just wishing one of us local boy scouts would cum around and do our "good deed" for the day in their pussy.
There was one of those young moms that I always wished I had fucked!!!!! What a SWEEET pair of titties she had - and gorgeous legs that went all the way up to her pussy!
Keep these evil fucking mom and son stories "cumming" and I'll keep "cumming" reading them!
good job
Although I read this one after the contest I still think it deserves a 5!!
WILD!
*****
gob smacked
Your a hero!!!!!
OMG! I was reading the story & was imagining me & my mom (*****)
:)
A little far retched...
But nice & hot, nonetheless
Ignore the moron who talks like a dog
Rover the idiot used the term retched? Sounds like a high school reject to me.
Story was very interesting, unique and imaginative. I bet the hypnotherapist also cured his own mother of sea sickness the same way. Which is why he did not undo his "mistake".
I will never look at a boat ride at Disneyland the same again.
Kudos to a great story. Would be even better if there were pics. :)
Lucky kid
The thought of a young kid being offered to make it with his own 45 y/o Mom on a boat, in a bikini no less? Well okay Mom, just hike up that skirt for me and lets get to it!!! A boy couldn't possibly cum any harder than when his delivers into his hot sexy Mom.
Sex on a Boat
A unique story, not altogether logical but a fun read.
wet and wild
Another great unusual schema for mom/son sex! I think that incest involving mothers and sons is the hottest and most fascinating kind of sex. I'm glad that you made the mom a real middle-aged mom who is still capable of arousing young men--not some still young parent who got pregnant at 16. This seems far more real--and far more satisfying. These are a pair who really love each other; wonderfully arousing and stimulating. I have just one quibble: now that they have brought each other to the best orgasms ever, do they really have to get back on a boat before they can do it again?
THE BOAT RIDE
WRITE A SEQUEL. LET THEM HAVE ALL THEY WANT! THE FILTHIER THE BETTER. FILL HER UP! LONG, WIDE, DEEP AND CONTINUOUSLY.
It wasn't the boat ride
Mother it seems planned these five star boat rides and it can safely be assumed that sleeping beds changed to one bed for them to enjoy their own boat ride vibrations.
so refreshing!
So refreshing! My cock was rock hard the whole time. Great tale.
Good job!
The only thing missing was her son tickling her tonsils with his young cock.
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