Great job bringing all the many details together! As I was reading, I felt quite a range of emotions. To me this says a lot about how believable you characters and all the happenings are. This is a story I know I will be reading and enjoying more than once!
Thank you again, DreamCloud!
Is Alia taking something to prevent pregnancy? Or is she unable to conceive right now? I imagine if Angelica gets pregnant she will be a bit envious. Has Cayden even thought about what would happen if Alia gets pregnant?
I have not seen chapters 7 - 9 so I can guess, along with you. I do not see Uri and Mylle getting together. That would separate Mylle and Angelica. Additionally, Uri is a boorish asshole.
This had to be a difficult chapter for a male author to write. I think you have handled it very well. I am loving the daily submissions, even if it does sometimes lack daily emissions.
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Anonymous03/08/15
Ah
This reminds me of the marriage in Dune. Even if the mistress stays for her lifetime, she is always at risk of not mattering in the long run.
both for the excellent story and for answering the question that had been bothering me. I was around in the forties and fifties but the young ladies only seemed to know about latex..... You surprised me because I thought that there would be so much love between the young couple that she would become excited..
I'm glad that I am not the only one who thinks that way. I get the feeling too that Uri wants Mylle. I am not sure if that is how it's going to be but if it does then that will be a bigger conflict. I am still not sure though, I guess we'll have to find that out in the next chapters to come.
I like this story, it is a bit filled with "too good" people, but there is one that feels at odds... Alia.
The prince loves her, and that is fair enough, but it feels fake... She has not really evolved, she is just there to fuck the prince whenever, but the chemistry between them is not really there...
The story has been made, and I have only just finished this... But I hope that she and perhaps Mylle will die in the stroy... Reason being that it is Angelica and the prince that has the real chemistry, and it would make a much more interesting story.
Angelica is (100%) gay, yet they love each other... That is much more interesting, and the difficulties of sex could make for a better story... Right now, it is just a tad bit to fantastic that everything work out for everyone
The Prince and Princess are in love? Alia is in love with the Prince, and Mylle are in love with the Princess, can all fall in love together? How a future King manage this?
5* for you.
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Anonymous11/22/16
If someone dies...
If someone dies, it should be Angelica after bearing a child. That leaves the door open for Cayden and Alia to be together (now that she is a lady) and Mylle can be the nanny of sorts to the baby which keeps her close to a part of Angelica and also under the protection of the Lion clan against Uri. I agree with the comment that he is in love with his sister. Now I am off to read the next chapter.
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Anonymous12/09/16
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Why need anyone die?
In LW section of this site, wives have often claimed to be in love with two men at same time...something never allowed for male character to love two females at same time. Not sure why males get so much short shrift.
I am drawn to your royal ''couple'' plus two. I have no trouble with Cayden loving the three females. True non-sexual love with two. Not sure why many comments have tragic ending for one of the females. Can easily envision long lives for all with ''marriage'' intact
Years down road kingdom's attitude adjusts-heirs having been born, Cayden long the King no longer has to hide eternal love for and with Alia
If you need someone to die URI WOULD DO NICELY
No other male heir to that Kingdom, Angelica lays claim to throne with Cayden Twobecome one and protection of both assured
English
Good stuff
four down five to go - don't stop now
really enjoying your writing style - thank you
Well met
Interesting and creative plot, as always.
Terrific!
Great job bringing all the many details together! As I was reading, I felt quite a range of emotions. To me this says a lot about how believable you characters and all the happenings are. This is a story I know I will be reading and enjoying more than once!
Thank you again, DreamCloud!
MastersWench
Is Alia taking something to prevent pregnancy? Or is she unable to conceive right now? I imagine if Angelica gets pregnant she will be a bit envious. Has Cayden even thought about what would happen if Alia gets pregnant?
ariesgirl
Ah, ah, yes - a natural form. Lily root and rue.
Wikipedia: the life saver of an ignorant male writer caught in a web of his own making.
So how long do we wait for Uri to admit that he is in love with Mylle?
That seems the obvious next step.
Great story though.
To previous anon -
I have not seen chapters 7 - 9 so I can guess, along with you. I do not see Uri and Mylle getting together. That would separate Mylle and Angelica. Additionally, Uri is a boorish asshole.
This had to be a difficult chapter for a male author to write. I think you have handled it very well. I am loving the daily submissions, even if it does sometimes lack daily emissions.
Ah
This reminds me of the marriage in Dune. Even if the mistress stays for her lifetime, she is always at risk of not mattering in the long run.
Thanks Dream Writer
both for the excellent story and for answering the question that had been bothering me. I was around in the forties and fifties but the young ladies only seemed to know about latex..... You surprised me because I thought that there would be so much love between the young couple that she would become excited..
To Anonymous
I'm glad that I am not the only one who thinks that way. I get the feeling too that Uri wants Mylle. I am not sure if that is how it's going to be but if it does then that will be a bigger conflict. I am still not sure though, I guess we'll have to find that out in the next chapters to come.
Uri
My thoughts are, Uri is in love with his sister!
The problem Alia
I like this story, it is a bit filled with "too good" people, but there is one that feels at odds... Alia.
The prince loves her, and that is fair enough, but it feels fake... She has not really evolved, she is just there to fuck the prince whenever, but the chemistry between them is not really there...
The story has been made, and I have only just finished this... But I hope that she and perhaps Mylle will die in the stroy... Reason being that it is Angelica and the prince that has the real chemistry, and it would make a much more interesting story.
Angelica is (100%) gay, yet they love each other... That is much more interesting, and the difficulties of sex could make for a better story... Right now, it is just a tad bit to fantastic that everything work out for everyone
I don`t know what to say
The Prince and Princess are in love? Alia is in love with the Prince, and Mylle are in love with the Princess, can all fall in love together? How a future King manage this?
5* for you.
If someone dies...
If someone dies, it should be Angelica after bearing a child. That leaves the door open for Cayden and Alia to be together (now that she is a lady) and Mylle can be the nanny of sorts to the baby which keeps her close to a part of Angelica and also under the protection of the Lion clan against Uri. I agree with the comment that he is in love with his sister. Now I am off to read the next chapter.
reading comments
Why need anyone die?
In LW section of this site, wives have often claimed to be in love with two men at same time...something never allowed for male character to love two females at same time. Not sure why males get so much short shrift.
I am drawn to your royal ''couple'' plus two. I have no trouble with Cayden loving the three females. True non-sexual love with two. Not sure why many comments have tragic ending for one of the females. Can easily envision long lives for all with ''marriage'' intact
Years down road kingdom's attitude adjusts-heirs having been born, Cayden long the King no longer has to hide eternal love for and with Alia
If you need someone to die URI WOULD DO NICELY
No other male heir to that Kingdom, Angelica lays claim to throne with Cayden Twobecome one and protection of both assured
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