Lots of simple mistakes in this. Good idea, but forced and compressed. I'll abstain from voting at this point. Just try to resolve your writing glitches.
Can't wait to see how she uses him to punish her hubby. Great idea. Please continue!!
I like where this story is leading so far. I'm looking forward to the future chapters of how the weekend progresses. Please continue.
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Lots of simple mistakes in this. Good idea, but forced and compressed. I'll abstain from voting at this point. Just try to resolve your writing glitches.
Great start!
Can't wait to see how she uses him to punish her hubby. Great idea. Please continue!!
Nice beginning
I like where this story is leading so far. I'm looking forward to the future chapters of how the weekend progresses. Please continue.
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Back to The Replacement Slave Ch. 01 or
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