Afghanorama

Really?

White MP helmet? Jeep(like the ones they replaced before DS?)? 2 guys and 1 veh downrange on there own? I like the idea of the story, and even the style... but if you are going to write a mil-fic at least find out that bravos... or for that matter cagekickers(31b/e) havent wont white helmets in 20years or more. lol

The other anon has it right:

Too many screamers in this one. With all the allowances we make for stroke fiction, we can't really do that for your stories, DevisPixi, because you present stories that call us to believe, rather than just asking us to "suspend disbelief."

This was a mission that would NEVER have happened. There's NO WAY to MP's in a "jeep" wearing white (read:"target") helmets would have rolled out to pick up a Talib. No way. And their arrival at the hideout? Utterly implausible.

But ... still better than 90% of what's out there. It's just that you've raised expectations, you know? Remember: "always under-promise, and over-deliver." It rarely fails.

"Your American penis is so different from out Afghan men's," she said while I hardened in response to her touch. "Because of your practice of genital mutilation..."

Seriously? You don't know that all muslim males are circumcised?