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by Anonymous04/05/15

Not sure about the point to this story

This story/essay seems like a "resume" written in paragraph format. Not sure if anything more is planned, but I felt "left hanging" at the end. To make this better, I'd suggest providing characterization - motivations, personalities, quirks - will give the story some "excitement" to draw readers in.

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