My Wife Takes a Second Job

pathetic writing

Even a stroke story should be readable!

Do you imagine in this fantasy that you're the fucktard Stout, brown-noser Tom or the pathetic husband?

Doesn't matter because none of the characters are worth being or reading about.

A person has to be really sick to write such shit.

If you really want to do something author, quit posting.

Garbage. She would have made more money suing him for rape.

Instead of being fucked, the courts would have fucked him, the other inmates would be fucking his ass and she would be fucking him in the wallet as the courts reward her.

Or is that too difficult a concept for you to write about?

junk

A really worthless piece of writing that can only tempt some of the really depraved and basic readers out here

I have to agree with @Whackdoodle and @dyonysos...

I have to agree with @Whackdoodleand @dyonysos...This is a bad story!!! With the contract and the harassment and the fotos he took, soon she would own the company...But this story is sad because another thing: To be poor doesn't mean that a woman or a man will accept this kind of shit!!! This kind of writing doesn't respect people that have to work hard to support their family...1*

Trash

Why take the time to write something like this, wrong category should ne in Junk category

Check his other stories. Totally into rape, humiliation, harassment: a sicko.

Just another demented pervert who thinks women are dog shit, and his stories treat them accordingly. Wanna see some dog shit, author? Go look in the mirror. Or get Bonnie to send you some selfies, anonymously.

yes I'll be happy to send you some photos of dog shit, I have many of annony's family!

his wife the whore and him on his knees begging he to let him lick the cum out of her pussy! And then there's his mother and father both strays and mutts! But the best one is dear old annony himself sucking cocks!

Very, very poorly written!

This reads like it was written by a kid. I suggest you take some on line writing courses if you intend on posting more. This is embarrassing.

5

good story

You need a writing course

If you are going to write you should at least learn the difference between to, too, and two as well as there, their, and they're since you managed to use the wrong ones every time. I find that homonyms--words that sound alike but are spelled differently and have different meanings--cause amateur writers the most trouble. This was written an a junior high school level.

logic

Even stroke stories have to have some logical connection to the real world of 2015. Would anyone really or even possibly even think of doing these acts?

stolen

This is not ypur story !!!!!

Get a good editor

You REALLY can't write. This was a trainwreck. Almost completely unreadable. Dialogue by a ten year old? Awful.

keep writing and drive you annony fools crazy!!!

gave it a 5

oh man

you start a story where the shit hits the fan in the first paragraph and makes it really not sexy already then. what do you expect ? a Hooray! 1 star

re: Garbage. She would have made more money suing him for rape.

Thank you. Someone who gave this more than a moment's thought -- which rules out the writer. A simple audio recorder or smartphone could do wonders for creating a case against the asshole.

Great story love how you discribed the sex!!

a big old 5 for your effort

is this a repost or stolen story?

I read this same story awhile ago.

Dumbest shit ever

# 1

What crap from this chucky author

We all know the way this guy writes. Making this women into a total whore from a good housewife. Just pure trash!

Unimpressed.

What's the second job? She works full time at this one. The story hasn't changed much since the last time it was submitted either.

Freaking great

Ah for a wife like this. Sweet. Hot. Sexy.

Gave it a 1

Sweep this trash out of this category and dump it into the garbage can. Ignore that cunt bonnietaylor2, she wouldn't know a good story if it bit her in the ass. 1*

I would like to see how Debbie continues in her new job...

but you DESPERATELY need an editor. Too many mistakes!
3*'s but if not better it will be 1 next time.

rerun what gives

I've read this story on here before

Nothing new here, and I'm sad to say...

...you care so little for either the story or your audience or even your own work, that you let something out of the keep with more errors of grammar and spelling,mean a second grade telling of last summer's activities.
This sad thing is cemented now, in minds and the archives as a testament to a poverty of effort, with a very large number of issues with the story itself, and little or no care for the characters.
Shame, shame.

# 1

Worthless crap

sheesh

You look good on you

Did you even try to make an effort

or did you just let the 12 monkeys loose on the 12 typewriters?

Not worth...

... any comment.

Sad

This is pathetic.Really. Sorry, but you can't write.

This is a majestic example of everything that is wrong with this website.

Quite a few comments were negative but the story itself has some merits

THIS IS A STORY. FICTION. FANTASY. HOWEVER YOU SHOULD PUT IT IN NON-CONSENT CATEGORY
In a story like this nothing has to be totally plausible.
What is missing is her consent.
In a good Loving Wife story she likes to have her boss's dick shoved deep in her pussy. You made the wife a victim of sexual exploitation.
Otherwise the story is a perfect jack off fantasy.
The wife was depicted masterfully.
But she is not a loving wife.