Her Inconvenience

Hot! But...

You write very well, and the story was enjoyable and erotic. I don't know about anyone else, but it seemed that Dean -if not exactly forcing- was certainly IMPOSING himself on Lindsay. It just seemed a little too close to rape for my comfort. In the continuation of this story, it is much more mutual, so perhaps Lindsay was not yet aware of her feelings for Dean. Maybe going into that a little bit would help - a wrestling-with-her-conscience sort of thing. Also, more of a build-up would have been nice. But these are minor things; you write very well and certainly have a talent for it. Keep up the good work! [meg]

Outstanding story.

I enjoyed reading this story, it is fantastic. I wish that you would write some more stories soon.

Might give a stiffy to a 13-yr-old virgin

Typos and the author couldn't decide whether she was telling this second person or third person. Learn to write.

Very Good

That was a big turn on for me.

Sub?

Is she sub? I noticed that she doesn't really voice her opinions about all of it. She just goes along with it and there's not much struggle...at all. Just something to think about.

good

cant wait for next chapter

More 'massive' tits.

Just where did this US obsession come from? There's nothing at all sexy about being overweight, as folk in less obese places appreciate.

Mechanical

Not very enticing. All about Dean and taking what he wants. Even he doesn't seem to feel anything beyond the mechanical. Poor Lindsey just sits there like a blow-up fuck doll and lets him do whatever. Needs some feelings for both

Mechanical

Lindsey just sits there like a blow-up fuck doll and lets Dean do what he wants. Nobody feels anything. Why bother.

A rape?

it sounds like a rape. And i fucking hate it.

I pretty much agree with the last poster, its like the sister was enjoying herself somewhat, but was more like in shellshock and just doing what he said. He certainly wasn't asking her opinion or permission, lol. She wasn't interactive and that pretty mych killed it for me...more like she was afraid to say anything for fear of what he might do. :/