15th Anniversary Dinner Appetizer

Rated 3*, but...

I rated this story 3*, because it's realy a LW story, but I have a comment: Why write it in the second person, telling his wife what was happening, if she was there feeling it all first hand?

It was going so well

There were a few vague points in the text, a possibly bad apostrophe, but you kept up the good proofreading .............

............ Until you fumbled on the last word.

Not sure this is a loving wife in action

She seems to flirt around with insulting him and his "penis" to REALLY putting him down about his cock size. Pretty demeaning and humiliating if you ask me. Not too much like teasing as it was insulting and down right cruel. I wonder if he felt like he was dying of thirst in the "desert"?

Desert/dessert

The Arabs didn't desert their dessert in the desert.

Nice as the years of their marriage go by they find fresh and news ways to have fun in bed with each other . I enjoy the fact that there are couples who try new stuff and have fun without going outside of the marriage with others. Most of the stories involve another guy with a big dick or some pig from hubby's office that are better lovers or doing things that the husband or wife won't do. IF your happy I believe that any hubby or wife would try almost anything to key their marriage exciting and new. Everyone loves that first time with someone or when you do something you don't normally do with each other. It makes your own sex life seem fresh and new

ANY ..

.. supposed "story" that tries to make out that the reader was a participant is a load of rubbish because the reader KNOWS he/she wasn't there and did not participate!!

Complete waste of your time writing it and a complete waste of my time if I'd bothered to read it!!

I was cool to this story for two reasons....

.....first, was that you tried to write it in the first person present tense....almost always a mistake.
Second, was that you mixed your POV several times.....also a mistake.

I like it otherwise, as it was somewhat original....meaning, not overly used, like so many storylines here. Finally, in this age of rage over BBCs and BWCs, playing the apologist for Mister Below Average Penis is not likely to arouse much but sympathy.
Next we'll be reading yet another cuck story from the rather small and trite lexicon of cuck stories that seem to attract cuck writers.....but let's hope you're made os sterner stuff.

The plot works, but the perspective or person tense is awkward.

You kept telling me what you were doing, and what I was doing, as if I am an Alzheimer's victim and you are trying to help me remember what happened. Is was awkward and not erotic.

And the attempt to make humiliation "sweet" was just a poor attempt to justify their cuck play. Apparently he is OK with Dylan hitting on his wife, and so is she. As their play continues and evolves Dylan may become more than just a foil, or has he already?