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Potential for more
So she never has sexual contact with another man, nicely done. I don't follow the "Do you think she knows?" & "maybe she knows Gina". You seem to be hinting that you are already planning a followup series.
YES!!!!!
Yes, Yes, Yes
Well done
I think your strength as an author is how you slowly but purposefully develop the plot line. The "one trick Penny" idea is ingenious but believable (although I can't quite get my mind around a guy who relied on, or needed, the "wife-as-prostitute" to be stimulated. But you handled her initial shock/disbelief as a matter of fact, and then concentrated on her growing development of a sort of split personality. The pacing was good and your character development was measured (no hard-to-believe leaps) and leaving the reader wanting to see more of that development. Good job! Please keep writing. You have a gift to develop, Thanks.
NO
NO! Let the husband stay a man.
YES
Enjoyed the series so yes please
yes
I was hoping she'd get it on with the quarterback, circumstances forcing her to cross the line.
But, given the overall tone of this series, it makes more sense that any further step 'Penny' takes would have to be agreed upon ahead of time.
The challenge would be to maintain the tension, or some form of tension. In this story the question was always how far she'd go both in and outside the fantasy. If there was agreement that she'd turn pro, where would the tension come from?
Yes
Yes!
Definitely
Yes!
Penny has been pushing the envelope in each instance and Dave appears to be onboard. I'd say that she goes for it.
It is overwhelming
Continue the story.
Yes
Yes, it should have happen already!
hell yes
yes to hot to stop just there
YES!
YES!
Swell
Another cuck story being born. Just what we need.
Yes certainly
she is dreaming about it, so definitively a Yes, she has to turn pro
And she knew
that Dave was so weak and she had already decided after chapt 2. Sad. Very sad. But this is Loving Wives and the story fits right into the LW mindset. The writing is good, very good I guess to evoke such sadness in me. The characters are not sympathetic at all.
please continue
I would love for you to continue and hear about it! Sounds hot as fuck, I'd like my wife to do it if it were safe!!!
Yes, yes, yes
Yes, yes, yes
Good story line
Nice build and semi-conclusion. Penny and Quinn would make an awesome money machine. Of course she should become a pro, and I'll not be surprised if you don't already have six or eight excellent chapters already written. I write as well and I know I would, it's too good an opportunity to tack to port and earn mega bucks with Dave's assent and support. There's already a shelter and a guide.
Yes
Hell Yes!
The Cucks Have Voted Yes
I kept reading your story waiting for it to turn into tale of slut & cuck. Actually, I fully expected it to go there. You did a great job of keeping out of that well worn gutter by writing imaginative scenarios for the couple. When you continue, it wouldn't be slut & cuck, it'll be far worse. It'll be a whore & cuck story.
re: I may have another volume of my adventures depending on feedback I get.
Really? You don't have enough faith in your own story to continue or not unless people kiss your ass? That may not have been your intention, but that is exactly what that sentence means.
of course YES
YES
Yes . . . continue Penny's adventures
It would be good if you could maintain the suspense (or tension as someone else commented) and continue with the 'will she?' or 'won't she?' scenario rather than the couple making a totally rational decision for her to turn pro.
I am confident enough of your abilities to foresee it will indeed continue with various twists in the plot. Overall, a good job. Thanks.
yes!
Would love to read your "career ' developing 😊
Awesome
Yes, keep it going ;) .
Another possibility
Dave & Stella are really into "Penny". Instead of her turning 'pro' maybe Dave could get some friends to participate. A card game with Penny as hostess, big winner gets Penny or have a gangbang. A friend could pickup Penny at a hotel bar and bring her upstairs where Dave could join in for a three way. They could stage a bachelor party with Penny providing entertainment. These are just a few ideas that would let Penny grow but not make Dave a cuck. Quinn could even be added to the mix.
Onward and upward!
I have already made it clear that I would like to see Stella/Penny return with new, uh, "adventures," so, yes, please continue, and take that as a well-deserved tribute to your writing.
YES
YES
Please continue
Please let us know about how Penny life goes forward.
Cinnamon
Yes of course
Great story line please continue
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooo
Leave it as fantasy, think of all the dangers.
yes try it
report back the difference in reality and fantasy.
No/Yes continue so we can see poor dave get fucked for sure
Another fool has opened the door to his own demise. So I am going to be the first to diminish Dave. I am going to start writing his name with a lowercase d, instead of the capital D.
My reason: Everyone of these poor smucks who seeks to expand sexual horizons always wind up experiencing cuckhold angst.
The new paradigm seems fun until the dark side shows up and it's not fun anymore but gut wrenching.
Whatever they worked for together up until that point is ready to be jettisoned into the abyss of uncertaintly. Unhealthy situations that include the possibility of unwanted pregnancy, sexually transmitted disease, drug addiction and physical misuse of both spouses.
Oh well here we go. I guess this is what we read loving wives for. Its what it is and thats why we read it, right?
Well raise your glasses and lets toast to another round of " a bigger dick, a better fuck, a more aggressive guy and the inevitiable humiliation of another husband entering wimpdom. Whpped , defeated, cucked, humiliated and pretending to like it.
@ mrixit4you Hear Hear
Spot on. Though the die was cast in the first chapter. "Penny" readily defined herself and "Dave" turned her out. This one in on Dave in my opinion.
A fun and quirky ride
Your story was unpredictable and great fun. A five. You are a clever writer. As for going further, do so only if you can keep it fresh and unpredictable. I imagine you can.
Ever the tease,
the author leaves us wondering what, in a possible future series, Penny might have in her (dare I say it?) bag of tricks!
Just my two pennies' worth.
Who cares? She wanted the quarter back, he wants the slut wife. Both are lost.
He looked at me sheepishly. "If she wanted to do it, I wouldn't want to hold her back."
There is a reason why that look is called "sheepish," its because its what a sheep looks like: stupid, clueless, simple, placid. Dave is no husband, but rather a mental eunuch waiting for the knife. Marriage is already over, and Penny is already, mentally, a whore. Any continuation will just be whack fodder for the jack off crowd. But that's OK. Fortunately there are still some writers posting on Literotica. In fact I thought you were one, once.
Go for it!
Since all parties involved seem willing to accepting of 'Penny' turning some real tricks, go for it. A partnership with Quinn could be very profitable for everyone involved and some real fun with the 'right' clients...
Go for it!
I enjoyed reading your story and was looking forward to the next chapters.
@ Anonymous "Who Cares"
I appears to me that writing for the "jack off crowd" is the easy road. I don't write erotica or fiction for that matter. I have written a lot of other material and edited a good deal and from what i can tell stroke stories take little thought or talent to be appreciated by the target audience.
This series telegraphed itself from the first chapter and if Penny continues as the story arc seems to indicate the rest of the Penny saga will be easy to write and, for some, hard to read. The Penny character has not evolved and Dave has devolved. Sad.
one more time with one trick penny
number 13 changes number 12 and you end up with the drunk and he gets you out of the room as he knows a way out and Dave can not find you. As for your writing keep it up may be keep working at what your doing some times with Dave and sometimes without but do not stop your writing please.
WORKING
loved your writing keeps you on the edge .I think you could just as exciting working at what you were doing with others.
worth it for sure
Go for it!
If you've got it....flaunt it!!
More
Another 12 please.
I would NOT like to read more
First I want to say that I loved your story. But I would dislike it if you continued. Penny was based on fidelity so if that would change your character would have a strange chamge of heart, because she was adamant on fidelity. If you want ti write something like a sequel than do it with other characters.
This was my opinion but it is your own choice.
JW
Faithful
Fun but they should remain loyal to each other. Why make her like a street walking pig when her and hubby are a couple who enjoy making each other happy. Couples that don't try new things with each other wind up divorced because they look elsewhere to try. Keep them together , loyal to only each other . She's on the fence and needs to get away from her prostitute friend, she's a bad influence who makes being a hooker sound like she worked in a church or something
NO
I like the story it was different but the fact of Stella/Penny having sex with someone else can ruin a marriage. Guys have to much ego to go along with it unless they are very secure in themselves but even then something can just set them off and it is by by happy couple. I say leave it were it is
keep going
Keep her pussy busy,let her husband have sloppy seconds
If i could choose, I would say NO, but...
If i could choose, I would say NO, but putting this last part in different category, shows that doesn't matter what we say, because you already have decided to post the following of the story...3* for these 12 parts...Thanks to her husband she stayed "One trick" till the end...
Definetly the end
It should have ended chapters ago. There was simply nothing interesting about the story. The premise was ludicrous to begin with, even for fiction. Terrible characters spouting inane dialogue. Just badly done and overall not worth the time spent reading it. And to end it in Letters and Transcripts just made me laugh. Wanted to hide the ending where no one would find it? Seems about right.
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