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AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Thank You.

Very helpful and amusing. ML

sacksackover 19 years ago
Both your How -To's.....

are essential reading on Lit. Thanks for sharing!!

slowdancerslowdancerover 19 years ago
......her voice now barely a murmur....

....but her words clear

Thank you so much

your thoughts are practical funny and i want to read more of your

stuff i just started and turned to this...

a great introduction

and I love the way you so clearly explained and gave examples

of what works and why

slowdancerslowdancerover 19 years ago
......her voice now barely a murmur....

....but her words clear

Thank you so much

your thoughts are practical funny and i want to read more of your

stuff i just started and turned to this...

a great introduction

and I love the way you so clearly explained and gave examples

of what works and why

LadyJeanneLadyJeanneover 19 years ago
A clever, witty

and indispensable guide. I wish I'd read this BEFORE I'd written my stories! Thanks.

NoJoNoJoabout 19 years ago
Loved it - You're an indispenesible tool

Every writer,will occasionally forget how to do sex properly. I find this essay is a very clear and concise guide to the pitfalls, good style, and meaningful content during sex. a vade mecum for any smut writer.

asian_princessasian_princessalmost 19 years ago
Loved the...

Janet evanovich cameo. That alone would induce me to give you a 5 rating. Good thing the advice was priceless and read like a dream.

Feel free to write a Stephanie/Joe/Ranger threesome anytime.

HulderHulderalmost 19 years ago
Thank you!

Some really great pointers here! Thank you for writing this. And i vould like to join the Janet Evanovich-fanclub! Will have to write a story about her, how about Joe and Ranger kidnapping her against her will, to keep her safe from the psycho killer who's after her. They take her back to the batcave where they have to keep her handcuffed to the bed to keep her from running off on her own. Then they take turns "guarding" her...

CharlemagneBlueBloodCharlemagneBlueBloodover 18 years ago
Simply brilliant

Simply brilliant, concise, informative and to the point with out getting preachy. As well as, a good dose of humor too.

amber_now26amber_now26over 18 years ago
Killing the killers

God, are we all Stephanie Plum junkies? LOL! Even if you had written nothing else, the advice about adverbs alone is worthy of the highest score. I'm hopeful that there is some karmic payback for every "slowly" and "softly" that I've purged from a story when I go back for a final edit. The damn things just seem to breed.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Is it really necessary?

For me to say that you're a fantastic writer? :D I'm sure you know it already. Thank you, both of your How to articles are must read-s.

If you havent written a story about a guy who's deadly wicked with somewhat too high sense-of-humor, whose hobby is to play tricks on a certain girl without realizing that he actually likes the girl and his teasing makes the girl hate him with passion, then I suggest you to write one coz somehow it seems you would write it perfectly! If it's reaalllly not your thing then just ignore me.

Keep writing, pls!

by Sarah on Earth

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
This was very good too. But some of the

bst sex writing has been done by vastiesmith n here. shewrites great stories too! Check her out!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Beginner's education

I am an older beginning writer of short stories. I consider myself educated, informed and now, willing to write and especially read short stories including erotica. This material deals with feelings that are so strong, so overwhelming that most of us would not dare open the box. But, if you get the words right and the right buttons are pushed the reader will join the characters in whatever they are doing-sucking, fucking, licking etc. I remember the first time I read about two teenage lesbians fucking each other with a strap-on. As the older of the two stroked into her partner who had totally surrendered herself to the point where she wanted her cherry taken-I was so worked up I had to leave the screen to masturbate myself to this delicious fantasy. A great writer can do that! Touch me and us to the point where the fantasy takes on a life of it's own. The mini-lesson (I read the whole thing in two minutes) will help me to write better. Thanks for sharing and educating me. JAS

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Oh, my.

EVERYONE who writes sex scenes should read and heed this.

I love it. I even sent the link to a friend of mine who writes male/male stuff, and I've read a few and come away confused due to anatomically impossible things.

~Sensory_Overload

connman44connman44almost 18 years ago
I can add one more

This contains some wonderful advice. I'm going to go back through my current story with these ideas in mind. I have one addition that bugs hell out of me as a reader: the misplaced hymen. I don't know how many stories I have read in which he pushes in several inches and encounters the obstruction of her hymen. Folks, it just doesn't happen; the hymen is right at the mouth of the vagina, not several inches inside. If he gets inside at all he is already past it. Like so many of the other errors, it slows down the reader and draws his attention away from the story. Since sex stories deal with body parts we really need to know at least basic anatomy.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Great advice!

This will certainly help me as I try to write my first story this weekend.

duddle146duddle146almost 18 years ago
Earl-ly Training!

Just when I thought I knew how to write a sex scene. *winks* Earl, if we all read and absorb your How To there's going to be a lot of happy readers. I like your 'let's take it nice and easy' approach. You're a wonder man. Okay, I'm off to read your other stories.

Tom CollinsTom Collinsover 17 years ago
Hey Da Oil *kiss*

I think I might have to go through my stories and see just how bad the Invasion of the Killer Adverb really is. Great How To, darlin'. Gonna read the other one now.

HunterBlackLunaHunterBlackLunaalmost 17 years ago
Very Helpful

I'm just starting out as an erotic writer, and this has helped me quite a bit in toning up my first submission. ^^

bigrimmstalesbigrimmstalesalmost 16 years ago
excellent advice..

as i slowly, gently wrapped my legs around his aching body thinking how nice it would be if he'd plunge his hot sausage into my warm rice pudding and cream...lol...i loved the euphemisms!!! I was cringing as i remembered one I wrote into a story and it was picked up by a reader. Enough to make this man blush as his cock goes limp with the embarassment of that memory...to rise to a crescendo of fullness as he remembers his 'literotic' successes...lol. Yes, excellent advice.

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
great advice

i loved reading this, i learned so much. i especially enjoyed this "I shoved my turgid gearstick of joy into her throbbing tunnel of love." LOL! you're so funny.

CBjustCBnothingbutCBCBjustCBnothingbutCBover 14 years ago
Loved it!

Or should I say, trembled with ecstasy as my liquid blue eyes quivered shimmeringly over the turgid literacy of your eloquent prose. //

Yes, turgid. Maybe you should add that many writers could benefit from using a dictionary? Some of the funniest malapropisms (and mis-spellings and just plain wrong usages) come up at times on Lit, jolting the reader (well, this reader, anyway) out of the "mood" of the piece and taking its overall quality down a notch or two. //

Thanks for the "how-to". Enjoyed reading it and loved the humour. Attack of the killer adverbs, indeed.

MaiDawtonsMaiDawtonsover 14 years ago
Wished I would have read this sooner

I am a very new short story writer, never writing one until August of this year. I posted my first story just a month and a half ago. I found this article very helpful, I am hoping I can put it to good use for my next story. Thank you for sharing your knowledge and insight.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Thank you!!!

I'm a new writer and I'm just gathering some data to write my first sex scene (I'm reading both stories and articles such as this). Juts wanted to thank you for all the advices, this made me realize some of the changes I have to do and some of the things I should be thinking whil writing the story. So thanks!

darcysweetdarcysweetabout 14 years ago
Hi, my name is Darcy Sweet and I have an adverb problem

It's been, five minutes since my last adverb. I'm trying, really trying but it's astonishingly hard. Oh damn, make that a couple of seconds.

Great article. So clever.

I'm off now to read your work. Slowly.

voluptuary_manquevoluptuary_manquealmost 14 years ago
Sex with a Satyr?

I like it!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
her it is.

tuscalosa is a drunkpanamanen dwarf and he sees a drunk girl. She is hot with dark skin and hair. he walks over to her. "hey you wanna fuck" he asks.

"i dunno, im jamie" jamie said.

"i'll mak u feel gud." tuscaloosa said.

"ok, b gentle" jamie said.

tuscaloosa took of her cloths carfully. he played wit her niples an she mowned as fellings of plesure swept over her.

then he fingered her and she screemed at teh electric pleasure.

jamie cums. jamie takes off his cloths. then jamie bendz down an sucks tuscaloosa's cock. he mowns cause it feels greaat. she stopz wen hes hard.

"r u ready" tuscalusa asks. jamie nods.

tuscaloosa super-glued the credit cards he got from his pocket to jamie's niples an put his cok in her pusy. he brok her himen and she gassed in paine.

"ru ok?" he asks.

"yeah" Jamie sayd cryin, but ten she stoped caus it felt reelly gud.

he fucked her silly. her breasts bouncing up an down. teh credit cards aplied constant attension to her breasts, causing jamie 2 mown. it felt really good. tusscalusa coldn't tak it n e mor an came inside jamie.

"i luve u" tuscalosa said.

"me 2" says jamie.

dis is meh thnanks for yur storyz. i lick them even dough i haz no acount. english no furst language. so i sorry for bad speling.

aliparksaliparksover 12 years ago
Thanks

I just started writing erotica, I love it but sometimes I struggle. Reading this definatley gave me some things to try on for size, and your humor made it an easy read. Thanks!

travelgaltravelgalover 12 years ago
very helpful

This is great advice. I am going to reread my stories and see what I can improve upon. Thank you!

RaycerEdgeRaycerEdgeover 12 years ago
Great Advice

I've made all the mistakes listed in this article. Thank you for showing me how to improve my writing and providing my readers a more enjoyable experience. The section on adverbs was an eye-opener.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
very helpful

i have started an erotic lebian story and i have made the scenes extremly inviting, but after reading this help page....i have relized i can make the scene worth reading over and over. this will help to build my scenes and charcters for my audence. thanks for the help.

seldomseenseldomseenabout 12 years ago

Thank you, some very helpful advice

d360d360over 11 years ago
Thank You...

Dear Mr. TheEarl,

i wish to take a moment to say Thank You, for Your very sage advise.

i've been going crazy...trying to find info(free)...on how to write Sex Scenarios of substance. i've just met The Dom of my Life...He's intense and demanding. i've been required to submit written assignments daily. Even, though, i'd like to think that i'm kind of bright and the assignments seemed 'EASY"....boy, was i WRONG....they really are NOT! i've come to find that Quality Writing is a Skill. and then throw in the subject matter(s)...of BDSM...it's even harder. and finding help is very limited. Again, i thank You, Sir. i shall come here often, to check out more of Your stuff.:)

Sincerely,

d

RubenesqueAphroditeRubenesqueAphroditeover 11 years ago
Good Advice

Appreciate the article on the the art of writing the sex scene. What to do, what to avoid.. Good read.

CuriousAusGalCuriousAusGalover 11 years ago
Oops!

OK, just finished writing my first story and then began reading the how to's. Yes, maybe I've got it a bit the wrong way round...

Anyway, wanted to say that the section on adverbs was surprising and, for me, relevant. I think I just got eaten alive by my adverbs and I didn't even notice!

Will try not to make the same mistake twice.

Thanks for the advice.

cittrancittranabout 11 years ago
This is why I love Literotica

Because despite the haters and assholes who try to make others feel bad, everyone perseveres through it (or just ignores them), and continues to not only write, but actually try to help others get better in their writing.

And as a soon-to-be-first-time-writer, this particular one is...

well, basically a godsend, cause I can't write sex worth crap.

Still can't write it worth crap, but at least I know have several helpful pointers and a good place to start.

I salute you, sir (or madam)!

rubricarubricaabout 11 years ago
Amusing & informative

Nicely done. You provide excellent tips beyond just grammar. The adverbs comment is one that I think not many people think about until it's pointed out.Your humor certainly got the point across.

TheMogul40TheMogul40about 11 years ago
Excellent Guidance

Really great guidance on improving writing. Thanks for publishing.

MagicaPracticaMagicaPracticaover 10 years ago
Good advice

Still one of the most useful writing articles I've read, and I've read quite a lot at this point.

RedrosewitchRedrosewitchover 10 years ago
Thank you

I've just had my first story come up on the site, and it's good to know there's lots of advice available.

Cedric1369Cedric1369over 9 years ago
That helps

I've just started putting my thoughts to paper. This helps a lot. Thx

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
One Other Bit of Advice

It is people who have sex. Character comes first.

thecavedwellerthecavedwellerover 8 years ago

I'll give these tips a try and see if they work, thanks !

CharlieB4CharlieB4about 8 years ago
Is that a challenge?

I'll be up all night trying to work out a scenario with credit cards, super glue and a Panamanian dwarf.

Great guide with some sage advice mixed with humour. 5*

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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

I would appreciate some articles about gay sex.

jasperrocks51jasperrocks517 months ago

I'm working on my first story, and this article, your 10 commandments article, and assorted threads on AH, have made me realize that I was on the verge of making a LOT of rookie mistakes. I've already begun the process of up-leveling my craft as a result. And, I know I will make mistakes, it's part of the learning process, and that's okay. Thank you for saving me from myself.

AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

The most amusing thing about this amusing lecture is that both the lecturer and his attentive grateful audience suppose that eroticism is about sex-scenes.

Vittorio Vittorossi

AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

Just a thought, when you are describing how aroused your character is, make sure it doesn't sound instead that your character is suffering from an unfortunate STI, or something that needs a trip to the ER, like priapism. I've run across it here and in published romance.

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