by WriterDom
that is the most terrible ending i have ever read... it went from pleasuring thoughts to sad? not good
well I liked the ending, even if it's just a fantasy I liked the idea of the fucker getting his !
I loved the naughty, naughtiness of this story, daddy! And then laughed out loud when he had the attack! Perfect! I usually like dirty mommy lit more, but I'm glad I read this!
Good buildup and story for the most part, then you killed the guy. Would have been good if it was any other story, but that was just weird. Not a good weird either.
Love the story, all the way though- but the ending was by far the best part. /Hilarious/.
It seemed like you got tired of writing it, and just said "Fuck this." in literal literary terms. So awesome.
Please tell me you aren't just going to kill the dad like that!! Is there more?!
Why just kill the father off like that? ._. It's weird if you ask me. >.>
Not a way to end a sexy story! Heart attacks are no laughing matter!