Captive: Story of Abby Ch. 01

Very intriguing

But too short for my taste lol, this looks like it has lots of potential to me, eagerly awaiting the next chapter!

I'm confused

The first part of the story caught my attention, with the spiked? drink, then going outside to clear her head. Followed by men trying to push her into a black SUV (was one of the men the one who bought her the drink?)

"Captain" confused me - is this a police or military operation and why are they interested in the lady?

Then the story abruptly shifts to a time in her childhood (I'm guessing) when she got into a car accident.

The first story has potential - the abrupt shift confused me. But I am curious to see where you're going with this - I assume the two stories will somehow come together?

Please more

This is wonderful. You write really well and the story is intriguing and engaging. I would love to read more. Just please longer chapters

Nice

Very nice start to the story. Very intriging how we dream about very tragic things in our lives when we are clearly out of it on pain meds and a lot of stress.

I also liked where you ended it because it left us with just enough details to follow the story easy but enough mystery to want to come back for more.

Not enough

There's barely enough here to make it interesting. There's not enough here to want more.

All in Good Time

I'm so happy to see some feedback, whether is positive or negative so thank you for commenting!

To address the above:
Yes, I realized the first chapter is short. While I wanted to capture the audiences attention, I didn't want to give too much away. Mystery makes things exciting :)
The next chapter is almost four-five times in length and should be up by Thursday this week (hopefully).

Yes, the flashback plays an important role in the story and is there for purpose. You'll just have to be patient.

There seems to be confusion about the "Captain". I wanted this. You'll find out more in the next chapter. The next chapter should clear up any confusion, doubts. But don't let this storyline fool you....there are many plot twists and turns to come!

I'm pleased to see there is an interest in this story and hope not to disappoint you. I realize there isn't any of sex yet but be patient. All in good time :)

Okay...I'm hooked. :)

Looking forward to chapter 2.

Because you asked, A comment:

For a first time writer, you write very well. Your characters are differentiated and seem to be real, the scenes and the actions are described clearly, and the story flows (we even trust the flashback is relevant)...most of all, you have managed to pique my interest as to what happens next.
Just one caveat...is this really your first attempt at writing? Hard to believe that.

Strory?????

I almost didn't read this due to the title being misspelled. I am glad I did, you write well although a proof reader is always good.
Looking forward to an exciting series. X

Oh my goodness. I am honestly embarrassed in spelling the title wrong!! Is is possible to make revision after something is already submitted?

And yes, this is my first time publishing a story publicly but I have been writing since my sophomore year of high school. I have a few novels in the works and hopefully to be published someday but we'll see. :)

Thank you for you kind comments, I really appreciate them!

Great!!!

I can already tell this is going to be a great story, keep up the good work and cant wait for the next chapter!!!

Almost didn't read it!

I almost didn't read it either, but I saw the comments on the side. I'm very intrigued and I'll keep a lookout out for it. Great start.