by DrSpidey
Thanks, Anonymous .
Yeah. I know it was a little odd. But I thought this place needed a little more monster girl.
So I decided to write this. Thanks for your feedback. I appreciate it more than you realize. Glad you enjoyed it.
I'm sorry but the writing style bored me to tears, I couldn't finish the first page, really wish I could have, it was like reading a text book. No score, but keep trying.
Go back, re write this with a more believable story line. How could she taste like seawater? She's sucking his dick not kissing him.
Also, you're right. I don't even know how, or why I left that in there.
I apologize. I was distracted at certain points in this story and made a few mistakes.
I took most of them out, but I guess a few got left in. I'm very sorry.
Yes, this has some issues. The writing style is clunky and the whole first half of the story feels drawn out and at odds with the second. But this can all be forgiven as the sex mostly succeeds in being engaging and enjoyable, and that with a refreshingly original and attractive shark girl concept. Keep it up, DrSpidey.
Entertwined_Tails, I know.
I'm rusty for not writing in years.
There were a few times I was having trouble thinking up what to put.
This is why a lot of it seems chunky.
was wondering if this was a one shot or if you were going to make it into a series and i understand the writing was a little off and you are rusty i looked past all that because the story was good
Anonymous, I might make it into a series. It was meant as a one shot though, as will be most of my stories.
BUT, I'm currently in the works on a two part, or possibly three part series of another story I came up with.
Hopefully the first part of this new story will be up soon.
I absolutely love this one.
You're work looks great.
Mine is horrible and I don't post them anywhere.
Keep creating awesome non human stories.
Really enjoyed this little story and like a few other commenters I'd enjoy reading a follow up, better still if you made this a series. I really like how you've created what could be a fearsome creature and made her a love-struck virgin at heart.
It struck me though and correct me if I'm wrong, but his interpretation of "mate" is just a boyfriend, but I get the impression with her "mate" means something more like soulmate and father of my babies?
Regardless, keep up e good work, really enjoyed Corpse Bride too.
This needs to be a series, there isn't another story like it. 5 stars
Due to so many requests, I'm working on a part two. I had no intention of this being anything more than a one shot, but I'm making a part 2. It may be a while before it's done, though.
You would think men just thought of is sex ,we're not that small minded it's kinda of a insult