by Owain
I am in envy of this story. I only wish my first time was as this erotic.
I guess this describes how I feel with my man...but their first time, not likely.
Yeah, I liked it a lot, but I think there were a few words that were repeated one too many times (suckled, flesh...); but, other than that, I'd say it as pretty good.
Your story was well-written, and direct. It was a great blend of just enough storytelling with satisfying arousing content. So many authors hit either extreme and they forget that their audience doesn't want to read a novel, nor do they want a just few dirty paragraphs. Yours was a happy medium. Good job.
I wish the my first time with the gal i love is like this. I so love her... and i want her to feel great. Keep up the great work
Great exciting story. Picturing it in my head lead to an instant hard on !! Please write more !!