All Comments on 'The Veiled Web'

Thanks for sharing.

I hope there's another chapter; she sounds like a fascinating character.

A unique experiment without being overly graphic. NIce job! I like the open ended nature of the ending. She MIGHT NOT........??

(but she probably will!!)

OH Well.

I guess it makes a case for NOT having juvy records sealed, LOL!

Thanks, I'm glad I found this. Don't usually come to this category, but I DO like your stories, so I followed you here from your submissions page. I'm glad it was brief. Just enough detail to know enough, without having to know too much. Perfect!

words of many nuances for all, TK U MLJ LV NV

I do believe that the endpoint was nicely placed though it may leave dreaming continuations of the story!

Nicely written.Few words but max. impact.

But, from where did all this venom come from . You sure have a solid platform to further the story.

BTW, you ought to know I 'sacrificed ' 5 stars for your effort. lol.

I do that there is more to this story than this. She seems like such an interesting character that needs to be furthered explored.

I cant wait for more.

the Roman Caesar salute We Who Are About To......TK U MLJ LV NV

into the mind of a psychopath, sometimes what we call evil just does not come from the cruelty of the world, sometimes certain beings are just crafted with the psychopathic spark.

some say genius, some say retard, i say chemical, our intelligence our ability to remember/recall is nothing but chemical & synapses(whole lots of sugar too),so sometimes some of us are just born with a deadly concoction, Beauty + killer instincts certainly are the makings of a efficient black widow .

"He who neglects what is done for what ought to be done, sooner effects his ruin than his preservation." Niccolò Machiavelli

So if this groom fails to recognize a homicidal sociopath ... Fails to see what she has done ... Fails to see what she is doing ... Well, he's dead.

Good short story. One problem-what was the parameter? I couldn't grasp what you were try into say. Writing this I think you might have meant the outside edge or perimeter of the bag. Major distraction.

Is there a part 2?

How “Poe”can you go?

Nice read if your mentally deranged'., ……..

Makes you wonder doesn't it? (As I look over fearfully at my fiancee).

Into the average female mind😉

What Hitchcock could have done with this little bit of inspiration. Of course she would have had to be blonde, Hitch had a serious thing for blondes and this one is already bugnuts crazy. Signed: BTW

This was just odd. I don't really get what you intended to accomplish

Quite frightening. Any appropriate sequel would fit in Erotic Horror.

Don't usually venture into this genre here but I was going down your stories in alphabetical order. Loved it! 5*

A very strange LW's tale.

As did some others, I lack understanding.

Purpose? Outcome?

Glad it was short & I didn’t waste my time.

Bill S

This story is in the wrong category. Horror is more appropriate for the story.

Wonderful ! So well written. Great imagery and metaphor.

I’m a psychologist and feel the author got the pathology just perfect. Too bad for the grasshopper.

SHR

Ever noticed when kids bully no one bats an eye, but when the victim retaliates it’s all the victims fault. I see it everywhere and it makes me sad

Holy cow. That's a good twisted scary story.

What a stunning twisted dark little tale. Would have loved to read a follow up. One wonders if the "grasshopper" understands the deadly danger its in as it ventures into the web. Excellent story it sent a shiver down my back. BardnotBard

what the F.... K JUST WOW F....ING 5!