Get with how the world generally knows and/or understands the meaning of one word. That being "MUM" AS REMAIN SILENT OR QUIET, not a female parent. This minor issue is small but for some makes stories read poorly.
Love this story. You had me with the line: "You're a couple of lesbians who chose my yard for a love-in?" And things twisted this way and that, and the whole story was marvelous.
"Mum" as a female parent is common in British English, and certainly carries over to Canadian English. The reference to "council" as being in charge of the pools places the story within the UK legal system, typically England. "Mum" is thus appropriate to the setting of the story, and need not be changed. Using "mom" would be like having someone from England eat "french fries" instead of "chips".
Ashman, to tell you the truth/struth, I have not been a fan/fare of your/yore stories. However, this one/won is such a delight, as in Truly Scrumptious.
I shall have to goose myself into taking another gander at your other postings/prosings?
And yes/aye, I/ eye m/am poking/toking fun/pun at the language dullards.
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Anonymous04/06/15
on the. word Mum
For you language Nazis Mum is an accepted slang word meaning Mother anywhere in the English speaking world,so get over your ignorance.and sit down.
I sure wish the folks who take exception to terminology used by an author would identify themselves, or at least provide a way to contact them.
MUM?
To ask the author to come into alignment with "the world" and fix the language in the story by substituting mom for mum, is so wrong it is laughable. It assumes that there is only one version of the "Mother Tongue". Guess what, Mum is the preferred way for folks to address their mother in the country in which English originated. In addition you have to include Canada, Australia, New Zealand, South Africa, Ireland, Scotland, Wales, and . . . so many more.
It also assumes that all residents of the U. S. of A. use the exact same words and terms in every region and state.
Good Luck With That!
What an outstanding piece of work.
Each scene worked well and all tied together.
I loved the very original sex scene.
A rare, but well deserved 5 stars.
A shame that such a great piece of work has been detracted from by some less than helpful comments.
It was an amazing story and I loved it. I really wish there was a sequel. It actually is almost like a real life situation I am in right now except for the sex part.
And to you people making fun of the mum...who cares? It's a word that comes up like twice. Look at the big picture cuz it's a good story. Shame on you guys because I seriously doubt you could write as good a story as this.
But good story all together. (Sequel?) haha
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Anonymous04/07/15
What happened to Butch?
When he jumped the fence and Tod shot him dead with the gun he had retrieved from under his car seat?
This is a very good original story that is very well written. This is one of those rare Literotica stories where the well-written story grabs the attention and the sex is a bonus (rather than the other way around).
English
Enjoyable story
Good fun and well written.
Will Butch get a chance to shag her as well?
minor fix
Get with how the world generally knows and/or understands the meaning of one word. That being "MUM" AS REMAIN SILENT OR QUIET, not a female parent. This minor issue is small but for some makes stories read poorly.
Intriguing
Love this story. You had me with the line: "You're a couple of lesbians who chose my yard for a love-in?" And things twisted this way and that, and the whole story was marvelous.
"Mum" as a female parent is common in British English, and certainly carries over to Canadian English. The reference to "council" as being in charge of the pools places the story within the UK legal system, typically England. "Mum" is thus appropriate to the setting of the story, and need not be changed. Using "mom" would be like having someone from England eat "french fries" instead of "chips".
Yes
mum translates into Canadian english as being quiet as in "mums the word" or as a slang for Mom or mother.
Great story as usual I love the way they met :-)
okay, lets try again
Ashman, to tell you the truth/struth, I have not been a fan/fare of your/yore stories. However, this one/won is such a delight, as in Truly Scrumptious.
I shall have to goose myself into taking another gander at your other postings/prosings?
And yes/aye, I/ eye m/am poking/toking fun/pun at the language dullards.
on the. word Mum
For you language Nazis Mum is an accepted slang word meaning Mother anywhere in the English speaking world,so get over your ignorance.and sit down.
fun story, but mum's the word.
I sure wish the folks who take exception to terminology used by an author would identify themselves, or at least provide a way to contact them.
MUM?
To ask the author to come into alignment with "the world" and fix the language in the story by substituting mom for mum, is so wrong it is laughable. It assumes that there is only one version of the "Mother Tongue". Guess what, Mum is the preferred way for folks to address their mother in the country in which English originated. In addition you have to include Canada, Australia, New Zealand, South Africa, Ireland, Scotland, Wales, and . . . so many more.
It also assumes that all residents of the U. S. of A. use the exact same words and terms in every region and state.
Good Luck With That!
Great story, tedious comments
What an outstanding piece of work.
Each scene worked well and all tied together.
I loved the very original sex scene.
A rare, but well deserved 5 stars.
A shame that such a great piece of work has been detracted from by some less than helpful comments.
Excellent!
Thanks for sharing a fun read.
Great story
It was an amazing story and I loved it. I really wish there was a sequel. It actually is almost like a real life situation I am in right now except for the sex part.
And to you people making fun of the mum...who cares? It's a word that comes up like twice. Look at the big picture cuz it's a good story. Shame on you guys because I seriously doubt you could write as good a story as this.
But good story all together. (Sequel?) haha
What happened to Butch?
When he jumped the fence and Tod shot him dead with the gun he had retrieved from under his car seat?
MORE BUTCH!
Nuff Said.
Talented Writing
This is a very good original story that is very well written. This is one of those rare Literotica stories where the well-written story grabs the attention and the sex is a bonus (rather than the other way around).
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