hmmmm ... the title is not even spelled correctly ... in the era of spelling and grammar checkers .... I cant see any reason to read the story
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Anonymous04/07/15
Interesting premise
The misspelling in the title is unfortunate, but can be corrected. The story itself has promise.
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Anonymous04/07/15
Pls continue
More plz
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Anonymous04/07/15
THE GUARDIAN
For all those spelling freaks....gaze upon the correct spelling.....oh my word.....why have we as humans become so engrossed in criticism....and forgotten to look outside the box?
This is a unique way of telling a very simple; yet engrossing tale.
Much praise dear writer for what obviously is going to be many chapters of a good story.
Praise will always be tempered with criticism....but heed only that which is uplifting and will add to yours and the readers enjoyment.
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Anonymous04/07/15
This story is already amazing!!!!
Please don't take too long to post more chapters. I'm really into this story. I wonder what happened to her mom, also what do they look like and how Hunt came to be the one to take care of her. Btw don't listen to the haters and keep up the good work.
while i agree mispellet wurds can be korected not pointing them out when they are found just allows they writer to continue to make mistakes and take away from the story if the reader cant follow or understand what the writer is trying to convey.that means to say for those that dont understand english.it is hard enough to understand writers that are not native english writers or speakers it is just wrong on multiple levels to have adults that grew up reading and writing english that cant do so when they are trying to do so for entertainment or for work.my thought was if they met when he was 23 then how much could he grow when most people stop growing in their late teens not their 20s?
LOL ... the title is mis-spelled
hmmmm ... the title is not even spelled correctly ... in the era of spelling and grammar checkers .... I cant see any reason to read the story
Interesting premise
The misspelling in the title is unfortunate, but can be corrected. The story itself has promise.
Pls continue
More plz
THE GUARDIAN
For all those spelling freaks....gaze upon the correct spelling.....oh my word.....why have we as humans become so engrossed in criticism....and forgotten to look outside the box?
This is a unique way of telling a very simple; yet engrossing tale.
Much praise dear writer for what obviously is going to be many chapters of a good story.
Praise will always be tempered with criticism....but heed only that which is uplifting and will add to yours and the readers enjoyment.
This story is already amazing!!!!
Please don't take too long to post more chapters. I'm really into this story. I wonder what happened to her mom, also what do they look like and how Hunt came to be the one to take care of her. Btw don't listen to the haters and keep up the good work.
Love it!
Great start, please keep writing.
This story sounds familar or I have read one that is similar.
while i agree mispellet wurds can be korected not pointing them out when they are found just allows they writer to continue to make mistakes and take away from the story if the reader cant follow or understand what the writer is trying to convey.that means to say for those that dont understand english.it is hard enough to understand writers that are not native english writers or speakers it is just wrong on multiple levels to have adults that grew up reading and writing english that cant do so when they are trying to do so for entertainment or for work.my thought was if they met when he was 23 then how much could he grow when most people stop growing in their late teens not their 20s?
I'm not complaining
This is a great start. Please write more.
Hi, I thought that he was a teenager when they met? Where is her evil momma?
love
Please update soon love this story already
Going well
The flaws are minor. The concept is good. The emotions are nicely expressed.
The scene has been well-set for a good story.
Good Start
This is an interesting, different story. I'm curious to see where you lead us, and hope for an update soon.
Good story concept, Good start!
I am liking what I have read so far! Update when you can, we will be here!
I'm Intrigued..
This is quite different from other stories I've read. Please keep writing!
different
it's deffenatly different. I hope you continue the story.
Wow, that is so good
Llano and Hunter. I really like this story so far it's so sweet. I do hope you write more. #inlove
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