All Comments on 'A Gift From His Father Ch. 24'

by Absolutelywickedthoughts

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ms904191ms904191almost 9 years ago
hmmmm okay

Well for a 3 page chapter you take 1 month

i think you sould try and speed up

at least 2 chapters a month

AbsolutelywickedthoughtsAbsolutelywickedthoughtsalmost 9 years agoAuthor
Oh impatient one!

Chapter 25 will be released in a couple of weeks.

billyjim55billyjim55almost 9 years ago

OH THANK YOU OH GREAT AND POWERFUL MASTER OF THE STORY, LOL. I cant wait to see it in print. /ty/ bill

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
More

I think I see Esmerelda getting fucked over by John and having her ring of truth taken from her. Cannot wait for the battle and after battle sex orgy.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
List the characters

Since it is a long story and you take couple of months between each chapter it might be a good idea to add a character description (like you did in one of your chapters) at the beginning of each chapter. It gets very difficult to keep track of all the characters.

That being said, it is a great story and I am always eager for new chapters to drop in.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Thanks

Just wanted to say thanks for sticking in there and continuing on with this story . You could be like so many others and just stop . Thanks again

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Thanks to you and Spirit02

I finished reading this a few days ago. I started and stopped reading it months ago after attempting to get through the first chapter due to grammar, spelling, typos, etc. I'm not one to pick apart certain bits and pieces of a story especially when I read comments that reflect someone has maxed out their reading comprehension level. Critiquing a free lit piece in order for it to fit how they/I think the story should go, is close to the analogy of looking a gift horse in the mouth, although looking a gift horse in the mouth does have merit, it's called horse sense. Kudos again to you and Spirit02!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Great story :) Long wait :(

I'm enjoying this story very much and always look forward to reading the chapters. But the long time between chapters is very wearing. I inevitably have to go back and read previous chapters till I'm caught up again. Keep up the good work. Of you can get chapters out a little quicker I, and I'm sure some of your other readers would appreciate it.

newfield1981newfield1981almost 9 years ago
no complaints here!

You always come back from a long break with a great chapter. I like the direction youre taking the story, and i have high hopes for this new character Mistress of the ring of truth. Keep up the good story telling!

CrazyMasterCrazyMasteralmost 9 years ago
Really Good

Damn Good Story ,Like the way the plot evolves and love this series.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
MORE,.MORE, MORE!

I WANT MORE. I LOVE THIS SERIES. IT'S A MASTER PIECE, LIKE DaVinci OR ANY OTHER GREAT.

AbsolutelywickedthoughtsAbsolutelywickedthoughtsalmost 9 years agoAuthor
Chapter 25 will be released soon!

To my loyal readers:

Chapter 25 has been sent to my editor. It may be a week or more before it is released, but it is completed and you will soon be reading the next chapter. I hope you enjoy it. I will let you in on a little secret, it is a long chapter and you won't be disappointed.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Love the story !!!

Love the story

Some people complain about the misspellings and other things

But I think that you are doing a Great job

I'm looking forward to reading more !!!

Keep it up

This would make a great book !!!!

ms904191ms904191almost 9 years ago
still not posted ????

ch25 should have been posted by now acc to your timeline

are there any problems ??????

AbsolutelywickedthoughtsAbsolutelywickedthoughtsalmost 9 years agoAuthor
Your patience is appreciated

Chapter 25 is being edited. It is much longer than the other chapters so I don't want to rush it or split it into two or three. Hang in there it will be worth the wait.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Final chapter?

I wonder, why is chapter 25 so long? Is it maybe going to be the last one? I hope not.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Really Good Work

Nice to see this series has survived the gauntlet of persecution and had come out better for it. What once a good series of stories that lacked polish (proof reading and editing) is now a sparkling diamond in the bunch. Personal preference for April would have been for her to be changed to bisexual but then I'm not the author. Can't wait to see what chaos Esmeralda and her new convert get up to

ms904191ms904191almost 9 years ago
still being late

Its 19th of may

12 days since your last comment and still the story is hanging

Ummm is the problem big or are your editors slow ????

AbsolutelywickedthoughtsAbsolutelywickedthoughtsalmost 9 years agoAuthor
Sorry for the Delay...Chapter 25!

Thanks for your patience. The story is finished and ready to post, but I am having problems doing so. I got locked out of my account, but cleared that hurdle. Spent several hours trying to get it into the Literotica format. But it didn't take. So, bare with me. I will get it loaded.

It's worth the wait.

AbsolutelywickedthoughtsAbsolutelywickedthoughtsalmost 9 years agoAuthor
Chapter 25 Submitted

Thanks again for your patience. Chapter 25 has been submitted and should post in a few days, barring no hiccups. This will be the longest chapter 8 pages. Enjoy! Submit 5's if you like it!

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
i like it a lot

this would make a good anime movie

palewriterpalewriterover 8 years ago
if laurel had an ounce of integrity

the ip's for the ignorant racist comments would be banned for all eternity and then some. why racism gets such a pass on literotica is way beyond me. poor white, knuckle dragging, white trash embarrass themselves and the rest of us, regardless of ethnicity, by being given free rein.

SheridanrdSheridanrdalmost 6 years ago
Late to the party

Just started reading this series last week, and I'm glad I stuck it out to Chapter 24.

The story got good!

And yes, that does imply it started rather lackluster. I have been wondering why you never went back to fix the earlier chapters. Not just have your editor catching the gramitacal errors, but the continuity glitches.

1. The corrupt bank manager is never handled (on stage).

2. The ring(s) are introduced as ancient technology, but have always been Magically used.

3. The need for John to continue to increase his pool of Agents without gaining an increase in power. (Either make him much weaker to start or mention a leftover stockpile).

4. And most bothering to me. Dr. Zachary Smith didn't have any Agents when he died?? Also, you imply he was at least a century old, but then claim L. Ron Hubbard was also a Master of the Ring.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Quit begging for 5 stars.. It's unseemly.

Michael56SmithMichael56Smithover 1 year ago

Love your story twists and turns, ... but possibly you painted yourself into a timeline corner when you had Dr, Zachary Smith be over 100 years old, yet both JD Rockefeller and then some other short term masters before L. Ron Hubbard was the rings' master, (likely it was not for too long with L. Ron either), so that reinventing himself, (over age 50 years) back to college, 'boy' Smith, who was also lusting after fellow co-ed Mary, must have gotten the ring way back when L. Ron Hubbard was still writing(?), ... Or did Dr. Smith find that the Ring would let him travel back in time to make some fruitful long-term investments? ... and now all the other power rings are showing up, ... the story keeps improving, ... Also, it is much better to read it without all the grammar errors, thank you, and thank Spirit02, ... ;-) TTFN

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