Bringing the 'A' Game

Hard work

Laboured writing and a bit too earnest.

Delightful

A simple tale. I'm guessing most girls in her position wouldn't have made that choice, but she obviously wasn't like most girls.

Predictable, but sweet

A bit too sweet and predictable with a lot of holes in the plot!

I don't care what the other commentors said...

...because I liked it a lot!

nicely done - good flow, a different look at parenting - especially by proxy and how it affects the young.

Very well written, I liked it a lot even though it was fairly simple and short. I liked the interaction with the parents, who saw something in Billy that was good for their daughter and that was what they wanted above all. Her parents were playing two roles, that of her father and mother and the also for Billy who essentially had no one to guide him through a difficult time of life. Perhaps the daughter was wiser than most girls her age would have been, but it made for a good ending.

Very Entertaining Read****

Thanks for sharing.

didn't like it

Maybe it's just me, but I'd have no interest whatsoever in a girl who brought another guy home as her new boyfriend to hold hands with and invited me to dinner to suffer through it. She had no legitimate reason to want to make him jealous and doing so is just mean.

Disaster waiting to happen

I know, it's just a story. Real life situation though would equal the title of this comment. The main character is a contradiction, totally together in every way, with the glaring exception of his infatuation with Jane. Jane on the other hand is a self centered arrogant bitch, and most likely a slut as well. Anyone who would believe her statement that she didn't sleep with Chad would be too stupid to live almost. So, as a story it is a well written but disturbing relating of the main character's pile of shit life.

Not too happy with this one

I generally rate a story on whether or not I enjoyed reading it. I just didn't enjoy this one it left me cold and just didn't click.

Enjoyed the simple passion of this story!

Thanks!

THE FOREPLAY OF THE NERDIES

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That was perty good,

You could make this one go on and on. I don't know to tell you how well this story went. Truely a grest start. I've got to read more of your work....

bill.......5s all day long.

Great

5*, thank you.

Just boring long winded drivel about nothig much.

3* just for the effort.

with fear and trepidation

they move forward. barely. will she ever feel she is getting the country club life from the bicycle riding community college boy? when she brought Chad home I thought she had gone for the glitz. the c game. that the local hero might be appreciated more by Heather, the townie who was grateful her saved her life and reputation.
mixed reaction