Brownwood: I Dreamed Ch. 05

great

either im a softy or your a really great writer, but i don't know if i really want to see him end up with bree cant wait for the next chapter. and future stories by you

EVERY PERSON DREAMS AND HAS NIGHTMARES

if one can leave them in the REM zone, they may survive. TK U MLJ LV NV

Great story

The only complaint I have is that the chapters are too short and too far apart! Please keep up the high level of the story.

A skeleton walks into a bar

Fiction is like the old joke, A skeleton walks into a bar, orders a beer and a mop.
Well written characters have desires, wants, and those wants have consequences that are messy.

Great story.

I hope they get back together

3*s

You are manipulating the reader .
Your protagonist is suffering because of Bree Olson.He gets professional help, finally. And what happened , he went back to the Olson family. Any professional would have told him to wait for a little time to pass before apologizing. And to use an intermediary until he could have a face to face with her.
Right after the shooting he should have gone to a psychiatrist for treatment .

Let me see, if I was a poor writer someone connected to Ty will show up soon!
Gave you 3*s. Hope you get better. I'm


AMerryMan

You are forcing them back together.....let nature take its course. The therapist would never tell him to talk to the Oslen family this quickly. You are rushing it's just so Bree can again be a part of his life and everything work out. Life doesn't work like that and neither should your story

Following the story with pleasure

It does sound like a reconciliation story, but hey, that happens fifty per cent of the time even in marriages, and makes for heat... If the story gives you emotions then the author is doing his job.

I thought he'd found his balls

I was wrong.

Back to .....

DFW"CUCK" ..... your readers will help you look for your balls but let's face it ...... when it comes to this pathetic RAAC story ..... you had none to look for.

..... maybe they are still in your bedroom closet!!!!

I Smell RAAC, Unfortunately

“I know I'll be able to someday forgive you” – Forgive HIM?! As she herself said, SHE made him that way, she should be working on forgiving herself!

“I'd like to say I'll miss you but right now I can't say that.” – Good, I’m glad she won’t miss him, maybe NOW she’ll stay out of his life! And I certainly hope he doesn’t miss HER, at least not the person she is now.

Nitpick – In Florida it’s DisneyWORLD, Disneyland is in California.

“What he wanted was someone like Bree.” – NO, he needed someone like the OLD Bree!

“I also owned up to my part in our breakup.” – HIS part in the breakup? Maybe I misread something, but other than wanting a fiancée that would rather be with him than go out an party, just what did he do wrong?

I Don't Get It

I do not understand the anger and blame everybody, including Zach himself, are directing towards him. After enormous provocation, during a sexual encounter Bree insisted on, he engaged in rough sex of the kind he knew for a fact she had willingly engaged in with others. Maybe rude, maybe requiring discussion, but not warranting all this angst. What am I missing?

I started reading this

And by chapter two, I have to say, I truly loathed this man.

The author gave us a full range of emotion: Ire, hate, anger, callousness, anger, fury, cruelty, anger, disdain, petulance, and sulking...or and anger.

And considering some of the self absorbed heroes DFW has produced, I was wondering if the AUTHOR realized what a rat fuck this guy was. I am not a person who does not feel a mother can be beyond recrimination. However the way he said it, the brinksmanship he brought to essentially everyone...he was a jerk, a beast and a lout.

This says NOTHING about what Bree did wrong. But honestly, what did Bree do wrong? Is she not allowed to be scared at being married? Is she allowed to change her mind? Is she allowed to be angry, furious, petulant, sulky and irate like 'our hero'? Is she not allowed to break up?

Let's be clear here. SHE BROKE UP WITH HIM. And it wasn't Ty. It wasn't Frat Boys. It wasn't date rape drugs.

They were fighting. He wanted...DEMANDED what she could not give and he was an ass about it. So what exactly did she do wrong? She broke up with him.

So his demons are pretty inexplicable to me. It wasn't the best way to break up...but they had MONTHS of warning signs so this was not a shock to him, even as written.

BUT! Thank God the author DID realize what an ass hat this guy was being. He had an epiphany. He realized he was an asshole and he, after FOUR CHAPTERS of being an asshole, learned to apologize to people. (His mother and his sister beat him to it, by the way. Just saying)

Let's see where we go from here. It is in Romance and I am waiting for a glimmer of it to show up.(...and anger, and despair...and sullenness...and anger...Okay, I'll stop now)

Do people who comment even read the intros?

A RAAC? Well duh! It's in the ROMANCE category, home of the HEA (Happy Ever After) ending! What the hell were you expecting?

Foresic fossil is dead on

She provoked the sex, and was shocked he was angry during it? She was used to 3somes and suddenly was a prude?

Excellent Story So Far!!!

5* Believable characters and plot. The guy is truly bring torn apart, mentally snd physically. I think Bree is a horsewoman of the Apocalypse. She just keeps ruining the guy especially with Ty shooting our flawed hero. Ignore FD45, he's probably a metrosexual.