The story line and charters aren't bad, but the whole thing seems a bit rushed or 'thin' as the other comment said.
That being said don't let your characters get away from you, but don't feel like you have to bang out a story just to keep your readers interested. If it's good we'll wait for the next story or chapter. I didn't pick up any glaring spelling or grammar errors, but they will creep up on you with the longer stories...
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thin
A bit too thin and predictable.
Autobiographical?
Keep practicing
The story line and charters aren't bad, but the whole thing seems a bit rushed or 'thin' as the other comment said.
That being said don't let your characters get away from you, but don't feel like you have to bang out a story just to keep your readers interested. If it's good we'll wait for the next story or chapter. I didn't pick up any glaring spelling or grammar errors, but they will creep up on you with the longer stories...
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