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Picky
Tim was his usual cherry self.
Very good insightful story.
I saw that too
Anon, it may be picky to point those out but typos and poor grammar can get in the way of letting yourself into the story.
I am really enjoying this. It seems more real than many other contributions. The chartacters are interesting but remain normal people with normal problems and faults.
I look forward to the next chapter.
what I appreciate
is the rational approach to problems. A small dose pro-active avoidance and a minimum of denial can work wonders.
Jerry and Sandy are back in character - after that 'porn' interlude at end of previous chapter. If you want to give theman extra trash-mouth dimension, then you need to show it more often.
"I have to see one of my tenets" Tenets? Clients? Proof-reading is a pain, and auto spell check doesn't work when the wrong word is spelled correctly.
Nice
If this is the end, it seems, "All's well that end's well." If not, I don't know but I'll check it out.
And They Lived Happily Ever After.
Good story. Was tenets actually supposed to be tenants? The 5* I gave this chapter apply to the entire story. Every chapter made me want to read the next one.
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