Only a military mind could have written this. Well done.The devil is in the details. Uhrah!
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Anonymous06/09/15
Good. Not great, but it's a start
The plot was good. And very accurate, if I might add. But there were too many flow interruptions (e.g. grammar mistakes, incorrect names, lack of fine detail) to really be immersed in the story and get the full effect. Keep writing, it's a good story and it could be made much better with an editor and much collaboration/communication between the two of you (you and the editor, that is). My advice to you: if you want to save yourself and your editor some time, proofread as you go. Good luck!
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Army Strong
Only a military mind could have written this. Well done.The devil is in the details. Uhrah!
Good. Not great, but it's a start
The plot was good. And very accurate, if I might add. But there were too many flow interruptions (e.g. grammar mistakes, incorrect names, lack of fine detail) to really be immersed in the story and get the full effect. Keep writing, it's a good story and it could be made much better with an editor and much collaboration/communication between the two of you (you and the editor, that is). My advice to you: if you want to save yourself and your editor some time, proofread as you go. Good luck!
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