Turning Paige Ch. 02

Too Good Not To Be Better

I've read several of your stories and they have all left me frustrated. Nice pacing, nice plots, interesting characters, but really poor editing. Missing nouns and pronouns. Missing letter o (to instead of too). Capitalized pronouns in dialogue, dangling participles.

There was an English professor at my school. He had two rubber stamps: "I stopped reading here" and "Too Good Not To Be Better"

The first isn't appropriate for your stories. The second one is. Darn it.

Great story, hope there is another chapter!

Really enjoy your stories. This one is off to a great start, hope there are a few more chapters coming soon!

I enjoyed this story....

....and a hearty Bronx razzberry to the whiners!

More, more, more

Great characters. Don't stop now.

What's in a Name?

Remember, Chrissy was camming to make ends meet and needed an alias, hence Paige. I admit that I was confused for a few paragraphs, but figured it out pretty quickly. I would have preferred cam girl Chrissy to turn into real life Paige. I like that name better. I must say that these two stories were a pretty fair effort at romance. Hard to do that within a 48 hour timeframe and make it even remotely believable, especially when readers expect there to be lots of hot sex.

great

great wrok!

needs a bit more to finish it off.

Marriage, a kid, happily ever after :)

I love these characters.

I agree

with the previous comments. Very good work, don't stop now.

Nice tie-in

Very nice tie-in with your Summer in Maine series. Well done!

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More please!

cute story

a bit difficult to follow at times though. Why didn't he need to work? How could he arrange a transfer so easily? Why won't he have to go in to the office more frequently than one day per week?
It would have been much easier to follow the name game if there had been a point at which Paige made the full transition to Christa/Chrissy the back and forth was a tad confusing.
A Ch. 03 to bring us along to what happens next would be nice.

Excellent

Another good story. The story is important to the piece. Well done.

Shame about the ending

It was going great up until the last two sentences then it felt as though it hit a wall. A few lines on the trip to the house, a conversation over dinner about the points raised by rightbank , buy the house , a couple of more dates, THEN move her in

I agree this story has much more room to grow, even with the chopped ending. I'd say continue right when they go to charlies

Ending??

I loved the banter and the connection that the two had, but the ending just killed me. My wife was constantly asking what I was smiling at and was getting slightly peaved when I told her I was just reading a good love story.

SEEMS LIKE WE ALL WANT AN ENDING

PLEEEEEEEEEZE FINISH this story? I thoroughly enjoyed this story, with the right ending BINGO this is a candidate for the Hall of Fame (Classic Material)Thanks for sharing this Fantastic story with us! See ya!