A Dance Together

Easily this was meant to be a quick little romantic story, but I think it would fare better if it was proofread before submitted. The narration switched from 3rd to 1st person and made it difficult to follow (if readers are supposed to be following Taylor's thoughts, this could easily be fixed by putting her thoughts in italics or something, and NOT as dialogue). This could also be better with more attention to pacing and creating an emotional connection between the characters and the readers, since there is none. It was a decent start, at least.

Good potential

The mechanics issues--the main one being POV--were too distracting. And although this is in the romance category, I couldn't help feeling disappointed that although the story started out as a romance, it ended up in a car fuck. It's kind of, for lack of a better word, schizoid. I mean no offense, MissDXX. I voted a 4 for courage for submitting and for story-telling abilities. (Also, I'm a fan of one-page stories since I work full time). You probably just need a good volunteer editor, which I know is hard to find on Lit. You might be able to find a volunteer editor through the VE system or through the Editor's Forum. (You might have to kiss a lot of frogs in the search. C'est la vie on Lit, unfortunately.) Keep writing.