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Memory and Loss Pt. 01

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by Anonymous05/09/15

easy writing

Such serene, slow , almost laconic writing..Much enjoyed.

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by electricblue6605/09/15

laconic?

not deliberately so,

but I guess, when the description is longer than the moment described, the words must be efficient (sufficient?), so yes, I like that

thanks for your time, both to read and to respond, both are greatly appreciated

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by Anonymous05/17/15

Drama

The drama of his feelings and relationship tore apart the story - - - what could have been was torn from the pages. I gave you a 3 but considered only a 2, but my judgment told me not to add drama of my own.

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by electricblue6605/18/15

wasn't sure what to make of the previous comment

then thought about it. Knowing as the writer that the emotional core of the story makes no sense until a reader has read the (long) preamble to Part 2 and then all of Part 4 - this reader was possibly a premature commentator - and hadn't been patient enough with me.

For me, the clue is in the title - Memory and Loss probably isn't going to be all about sunshine and kittens, and Parts 1 - 4, well that kinda suggests they are all linked together somehow.

So, even though he scored the story 2/3, this reader at least recognised the drama. So that bit worked. And hey, a thoughtful comment, that's always good. Thank you for reading. I don't know if you've read all Parts, though - I had to wait, so you have to be patient with me, I'm afraid.

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by Anonymous09/08/16

A different view; Drama

5 stars. This story hit me right in the gut. I like it when someone writes well enough to draw out real feelings from the reader. It did piss me off. But wasn't that the writer's goal? To show you a betrayal that broke his heart? Go eb

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