All Comments on 'Little bit of a love poem'

by todski28

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legerdemerlegerdemeralmost 9 years ago
A quiet homage to love

Between the first and second stanzas lies life lived with a partner, so well captured.

avrgblkgrlavrgblkgrlalmost 9 years ago
This...

This is very sweet and gracefully moving. You have done a very nice job here.

HoneyAdoredHoneyAdoredalmost 9 years ago
Romantic and sensual...

I love it...not just a little bit...but a lot.

erectus123erectus123almost 9 years ago
Terriff as usual

I would say you have two poems here. I'd edit to a stop after the word cider, fix the next line and end there. These are the strongest part of the poem and the most universal. The rest is more personal and pleasant but the first part is the heart of the matter. But of course what do I know? Carry on Aussie!

todski28todski28almost 9 years agoAuthor
Thank you all

To erects

Something about this piece was bugging me for a while and I couldn't nail it down, I think you may have found it, thank you for the input!!

avrgblkgrlavrgblkgrlalmost 8 years ago
Often...

I come back to read this. It's rare and beautiful in a raw and honest way that is truly both romantic and prime erotica.

~ABG💋

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