All Comments on 'Collette Ch. 02'

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SNUFF SAID!!!

Can't believe Lit even allowed it to be posted. No stars as even giving it one star would be an insult to the star.

but this stuff is not writing just dirty talk with no story and not a sympathetic character. Made it through one page and quit. 1* just to bring the average down so others won't waste their time.

Sick shit

Another "country" or town without police!!! This is that kind of story that must took place in a parallel world where police doesn't exist!!! Where no one loves no one (they don't know the meaning od the word "love" or "care"). Things like this took place in the Nazi's concentration camps, where crazy Nazi's doctors experiment all their crazy thought!!! It doesn't matter what category this belongs!!! Against these kind of stuff II World War was fought!!! I have to agree with @ SuddenThunder: This isn't about pervesion, this is "A TOTAL WASTE OF TIME". OK, Hitler would give it a medal or two!!! This is a story that deserves well below 1*!!!

trash .... Completely devoid of any sense of tension, emotion or realistic depictions of any kind of human behaviour in the narrative and written in a staccato style that would be embarrassing to a 8th grader. Utter rubbish .....

It not only pissed off dear annony to the point he babbled and babbled about it, but it's a great stroke story as well! 5 for your effort!!

Obviously a fetishes category or nonconcent.

Oops, I guess it is, now. Sigh . . .

idiot. nothing erotic here.

and is brain dead friends!

Way to twisted , abnormal and should be in another category. This is definitely not a loving anything

to offset the shit for brains who gives something like this a five

Repeating this stuff over and over does not make it interesting. And your cop out "it turns me on" does not make you any less what you are.

This is not LW, and furthermore it is just short of a snuff film and not at all entertaining. YOu have succeeded in pissing off your readership, or disgusting them.

It's not that hard or original to come up with stupid, disgusting humiliating shit to subject someone to, so you are not that clever.

Gee, a BDSM tag. Hint hint where do you think this shit really belongs. (besides the garbage) 1*

The word is device or devices, among other spelling or misused word mistakes.

You need to describe what's happening to her in more detail, you hide the good stuff by using the poor view of the husband, we want to know what they are doing to her in graphic detail.

Skimps a bit on the sex scenes and definitely has a POV that is reused, but I love the setups and the situations. Excellent writer. THANK YOU!

Won't bother the husband because she won't be getting back in his home or life... bye, bye YDB

I liked it. The writing was well done. The plot (as a continuation from Ch 1) was a good one. It's one of those stories that has some s/m, some voyeurism and some loving wife, so it's hard to pick a category. I'm lucky, because I liked all the aspects. :)

There were a few typos that a good proofreader should have caught. If you decide to re-edit, just do the spelling and typos.

Great writing but I would enjoy more from you .

Thanks for the effort, hated it but hey you have some who like it...... Whatever woman fucked you over to make you write this needs help as well lol.....

Hi.. ur stories are always intriguing and erotic for those who enjoy this lifestyle.. you have right gave the disclaimer that its not for timid.. lol.. i would like to see more from u as u haven't been publishing much for last cpl of yrs.. cheers

fag cuck shit.

this one I'll have to think about to end it. right now I don't think she'll come home at all.

Please write more adventures for her soon

Collette and her dense husband, role played, "The Birth of an Atom" and Split.

Did Collette ever get back to her husband a

nd what condition was her mind and her body in when and if she returned to her husband?

ALSO, the introductory disclaimer at the start of this chapter MUST be placed at the beginning of Ch. 01 .

Olfrog14x

Seems like there should be at least a part 3.

Great Story. Needs the next chapter

So grateful your pathetic writing and the half assed career you thought you had here came to its conclusion.

Please feel free to never try your hand at writing again.