Young Couple in FMF Threesome

A weak start. Maybe give it more thought and planning?

The plot was simplistic and boring. Nothing very original, dramatic, or exciting about describing a threesome, unless you are very new to erotic literature. Maybe Group Sex would have been a better category, since the status of the marriage had no bearing on the story. Just three people who decided to have sex; big deal. I suggest you find stories you like the most, then deconstruct them into their basic story components to learn how the author crafted what you find interesting and exciting. Maybe you could learn from that? Just a suggestion.

loved it

Very well written first story. Kyle is a very lucky guy. Hope there's more coming!

More please

I don't know about the others, however I thought the story was exciting, had me stroking from the beginning, and had a great cum. After all, isn't that what these stories are all about? I look forward to your next adventure of fucking! Make me cum again. 😛

3 friends having fun...

3 friends having fun...3*

Enjoyable

Having had experiences of my own like this, I could relate.

And I found it quite a stiffener.

Probably

You probably should have had Mai say that she never wanted a MMF in their threesome conversations as she would not another man. Otherwise, a fun and sexy story. Thanks.

Only quibble: you wrote "... of Kyle and I." As the object of a preposition the "I" should have been "me."

I enjoyed your story

Thank you for writing a good story. ignore all of the assholes who bitch about it not being the story of the century. It was a very good first story and I look forward to reading more of what you write in the future. M

Enjoyable

Seem like a real experience. Write more.

I really enjoyed the story. Almost had a reverse cuckold feel to the beginning of it.. I definitely hope you continue to write

Loved your story!

It felt so real! Will there be more? Maybe another man? Will the two ladies explore each other?

Marvelous story

I really enjoyed it from your point of view. Well told. Keep at it.

Nice work!

I enjoyed the opening, the way the story flowed, and the style in which it was written. VERY hot, but not trashy.

I loved it

I would love to see some more

Keep writing!

I liked this story a lot and would like to read more from you in the future. I find this story sexy but somehow not "dirty", a very pleasant combination!