A Boy and His Genie Ch. 03

Looking forward to more chapters.

Here We Go Again...

This chapter just popped up and I only finished reading Chapter 2. Well, some of my concerns have been dealt with and I think Sophie will do just fine in assisting Matt with not screwing things up too badly. Everyone needs a mentor and she has had plenty of time and practice to figure things out. I appreciate that Sophie has the wherewithal to think things through before jumping ahead--it's something that Matt needs to learn soon--although I imagine that her relative immaturity will still cloud her judgment at times and make things interesting.

Overall, I find the premise of the story to be interesting enough that I might stick around awhile longer. Lucky you (LOL). Take care, then, until next time.

Roger.

@Roger

Thanks, I'll take your comments into consideration. Just so you know, Chapters 4 and 5 have already been submitted for approval, and Chapter 6 is half-written, but going with what you've said I might change a couple of the thing in Chapter 6. I do hope you keep reading!

simplest

have his genie gain all the hard won knowledge of the other in an instant with a wish. Ex: Lumiosa, I wish you had all the knowledge of a modern girl, or I wish you shared all of Alexis's memories.

It's a shame

Chapter 1 was so good it was a pleasure to read. Chapter 2 went downhill fast. Chapter 3 was a real disappointment. You had all the makings of a fine story, and you really let me down. Anyone can have an orgy, but having a genie of your own, is not to give your friends a blowjob, or to transport them to two on expecting girls. It's considered rape in most Western countries. I guess I have nothing else to say.

Dig a little deeper

it's a fun story...keep going...want to know more about the genies...more character development.

prolonged debut

I completely agree. First chapter shows a lot of promise. Then everything continues to go to crap. But the least of which is turning the protagonist into just another pathetic cuck.

I am not sure the caveat at the beginning is accurate

the main character does not think, act, or behave like an 18 year old. More like 13 at best.

okay that's it!

I am done. the story sucks damnit!!!

I'm out...

I gave it 3 chapters and it just grew more juvenile with every word... Sorry man, I don't normally bitch but this is killing me....

Man...

Some of you need to chill. It's about a HIGH SCHOOL VIRGIN who gets a HOT GENIE. You think that might have a juvenile vibe? This isn't the type of thing you read for deep meaning.

Trust him not to be evil? Oops! Too late!

I was hoping Sophie would smack some sense into Matt. Three years with her own genie, being a girl in high school who has likely had to deal with a lot of crap from boys and men and be concerned about he safety... One would think she had something to say to Matt about rape orgy and the fact he forced those two girls on his idiot friends.

The story to date lacks any soul. There is no depth here and it is not even a fun light fantasy because the cf characters are so despicable.

Good lord it irks me that there's people out there that could gain unlimited powers and still decide to be salty. Jesus fuck lighten up.

went from 2 page chapters to one pagers.. disappointing.