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by WiserSoutherner05/21/15

Great idea, but needs work

Things just seem to jumbled in this story, like a bunch of random thoughts just written down. There is no flow and therefore it's hard to connect with the writing. I think this is headed in a good direction and I mean to encourage you, but I do think some editing would be useful.

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