All Comments on 'Sharon's Story Pt. 01'

More editing is required. Too confusing to understand. I had to go back and reread numerous times to figure out what was going on...I just gave up couldn't finish the chapter.

Were it not for the piss-poor grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc.

This is the first story by this writer that I have read.

If his others are as poorly written, it is a mystery they scored as well as they have.

I read all your work I see almost every time someone bitches about your work. So people help don't bitch. At least this person has the balls or tits to put in down for us to read. Yes it needs some work but be nice about how you all say it, or don't say a damned thing. I'm no Grammer King or Queen I fixed it while I read it. If you can't do that in your head go back to school. My schooling sucked and yet I can read and understand what the author is saying.