by Stormbringer
This is new to Litrot, correct? but it has been printed prior elsewhere?
I'm glad to see you are back and writing again. Your stories are among several of my favorites on this site. Besides the hot sex, what really sets your stories apart is the time you take to set it all up. All of the attention to detail and back story is what really makes your stories so enjoyable for me. Other than some a few minor grammatical problems, this was a very good story and I look forward to reading more of your work.
But not great. There is no doubt you can write a good sex scene but this story got a bit monotonous. Bobbie Sue, Jenny and Kitty succumbing so quickly and in remarkably similar circumstances spoiled it for me. Still a solid 4*
Much like Cardinalfan mentioned, it's good to see you writing stories again. I love interracial erotica and I started reading your stories a number of years ago and have always enjoyed each and every one of them, so when I first saw this one and noticed you as the author, I just knew I was going to enjoy it, so good to see you back. I would have liked to have seen a couple more chapters though, maybe telling us how Kitty helped convert her other friends and cheerleaders into going black... and also more about her Mother Jenny and her relationship with the Coach. Hopefully this might give you an idea to write another chapter..
It was great being able to read this while having the pits art for visual's. Looking forward to chapter two.
but i banged a black guys girlfriend who was a football player and she was white and she left him for me.....and he was 8 and i was 6 and a half?! I asked outta curiosity....whats up with that? I'm not white or black btw and i didn't date her just plowed her...sigh* reality from fiction is so different lol good story though, i liked it...not for interracial purposes but was a good fictional story. 4/5 for it.
I thought this was a clever job merging so many other stories and comics into a united story. Fairly ambitious, but the idea of the voodoo curse worked well to tie 200 years of history together. My only real critique is 19 pages is awfully long. It might have been easier to digest in 3-4 chapters of 6-7 pages each.
Otherwise, your descriptions of the male characters' sexual attributes and the females' reactions to them always get me aroused. You are truly a prodigious and talented author and one of the best in the interracial genre!
Such a good read from start to finish...love the way everything tied together at the end
I was really looking forward to principal Long with Jenny and Kitty also coach Black teaching Kitty a lesson.
Long, repetitive, and you definitely skimped on the sex scenes...still got the job done many times, so I gave it a solid 5.
19 pages of bullshit to support a total myth and urban legend, nonexistent BBC. Comically bad and racist to boot.