A Simple Case of Infidelity Pt. 03

why was she gone so long

Why leave without a fight And no contact in 7 months. I think she thought he had made up his mind for the most part. So She wanted to be away from him So she could work on her relationship with Richard. She chose Richard over him first Then when that fell through She tries to go back to her second choice Francis.

What!?

There is to be more? Finish this weepy thing and get it done. Euthanize it.

Thanks***

For the read.

Nice job so far...

..I like the comment you don't know exactly where Francis is going to do. When I began writing novels, I was warned about twists and turns I had no idea about myself. It shocked me, although I knew exactly where a story was going to take me, I had no understanding of what the characters would do with me! To this day I remain shocked and humbled in the way my characters grew in a story and allowed me along for the ride.

Oh, and watch how you made a few mistakes jumping from 1st to 3rd person. It's tough to catch them all sometimes. Also, your punctuation wasn't exactly perfect either. Thankfully I have two editors that catch mine, my wife first and then my agents editor!
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I feel for Francis. My own wife many years ago decided to step out on me. I didn't believe it at first, she didn't change at all. Then little things began popping up and I actually caught her riding her ex boyfriend of many years previous, in our spare bedroom. I wasn't nearly as nice as Francis and threw them both out, naked. It was that or the length of rubber hose in my hand that had already left a welt on her boyfriend.

My own parents, I was fairly young at the time, decided to take a hand in matters. It was their house we rented and they demanded I let my wife back in, she had no where to go. When I explained she had an ex boyfriends cock to sit on and she could do it at his house, if his wife would allow it, they were enraged. This was the girl they planned on to be the mother of their grandchildren. When I realized how it was going to be, we had no children yet, thankfully, I gave in. Not in the way you might think. I asked for 48 hours and went to work.

We lived in a small town outside Phoenix, a very small town at the time. The house and furnishings were my folks, but everything else was mine/ours. I made a few snap decisions that probably weren't for the best. I took all of Maxine's (Max) clothes outside and into the driveway, poured lighter fluid on them and lit 'em up. Then I threw every picture we owned on it. Keep in mind, this was back in the day before computers. Then I threw every knickknack on it, no matter if it was combustible or not, I wanted everything either burned or damaged. Half burned photos of our wedding day floated around it the air and I didn't toss them back on, I wanted Max to see what she lost. Even the binder holding them all was half burned, which was perfect. Clothes on the bottom of the pile were scorched and smoke damaged, rendered unusable.

Then I drove away. Working for my folks, I didn't bother getting my final paycheck, I left it for them to give to my soon to be ex. I moved in with a buddy who worked for a small company that not only needed more help, but would pay me more per hour and I'd get more hours per week! I was ecstatic. I stopped by the bank and took my name off our joint account and opened a new one in my name only. Then called the paper to say I wasn't responsible for any debts my wife incurred.

My brother told me later, my wife was devastated by what she found on the driveway, where I'd burned everything. It seemed as though the pictures meant more to her than her clothes and she spent hours sifting through the ashes. Anything that she could see the slightest image, she saved it. And my parents were livid with anger! They knew something was up that morning when I didn't show up for work and our home phone had been disconnected.

Although our town was relatively small, it was impossible to hide. Thankfully the job I had started at wasn't in our town, it was a half hour away. My buddy gave me a ride, I left the car at our rental, I didn't like it anyway. Saying he'd fund me for the short term, my friend gave me shelter and food and drove me back and forth to work for two months until I had enough money to buy an older used 1972 Chevy pickup, which I loved! All the while, I didn't have to see anyone from my wife, to my family, nor work at my old job being hounded to take Max back.

I had Max serviced after 4 months. Other friends of mine said they'd seen Tom (her old boyfriend) leaving my old place more than once. I tried to pay two of them some of my hard earned cash to take pictures but they did it free, none of them liked my wife and before long, I had a stack of pictures of my wife riding and being rode by ol' Tom through the bedroom shades. The few times I met up with my brother, he let me know our parents were enraged by the way I'd reacted and expected me to take Max back. So I did the best thing I could, other than sit and talk to them, I sent them a half dozen of the very best pictures of Max and Tom.

Max was asked to move after they got the pictures. I guess it's one thing to hear about something, its another to see it, even if through photography. Max moved in with Tom and that's where I had her served. She swore her undying love to my lawyer but that didn't get 'er done and we were soon divorced. Marriage with Tom never seemed to be in the cards, she lived with him for about 5 years before marrying another fellow who beat the hell out of her when she cheated on him. Yep, she cheated with Tom again. I'd heard he had a big cock, horse sized, so I guess the stories were true.

My parents went a year before they saw me again and they were much more pleasant. We patched things up, I went on to buy into the company and over the next twenty years, ended up making a very large amount of money, allowing me ample opportunity to write all I'd like and it was something I found myself to be reasonably successful at. I also ended up marrying the owners niece, we went on to have two children and now five grandchildren.

Max? When I see her on the street I ignore her and pass her by, as though she didn't exist. She tried to engage me in conversation many times, but I simply walked away. I've never spoke a word to her since that day so many years ago, when I caught her riding Tom's cock.

So how long do we have to wait

I had to go back and scan through the earlier parts so I could remember just what this story was about. I hope we don't have to wait to long. I like your stories but they need to be spaced closer.

3*s

The stories Carvohi writes are generally a very good read. Even when I dislike the direction his writing takes for his characters. He does a fine job getting the reader to understand their motivation. As we read his extensively detailed story we grow to love or hate, agree or disagree, with his characters and his plot. Unfortunately, this is looking like a wreck of a story. Not a good one. Actually a disturbing story to read because I know Carvohi can write better .

This reminds me of your Revelations Ch. 2 and Ch.3 and Ch.4 . Each one has characters with multiple personality disorder. The wife Leslie and to a lesser degree the husband Francis . Disposable characters like the neighbor ,and the friend , and Leslie' parents . Important characters like his parents, and their close relationship with the daughter-in-law don't show up until the third chapter.
I was glad when you stopped Revelations , maybe you should stop this story also.

Take a step back, write something else. Later come back to this. Maybe rewrite and 're-edit "A Simple Case....". You had a very good start with a smart cookie of a city raised wife. Trying to pull one over the country raised , smart and trusting husband. Since then the story has been a mess.

Gave you 3*s and a prayer . I am a disappointed but hopeful


AMerryMan

WHAT A SURPRISE

Looking at the comments, I am surprised!!
I thought it was my superior analysis that let me make a unique comment . It wasn't and it isn't , lol.

Others write about the Revelations failure.The similarities . The problem with the characters and their personality changes. The need for another edit or 're-write .

I guess the problems with this story are pretty obvious.

And, I am not exceptionally insightful .
Who would have thunk it,lol.


AMerryMan

carry on

its really complicated but quite natural. go with the flow please. whatever

What happened?

1) this is not the same woman from part one

2) Francis, despite your efforts, is NOT a bad guy, nor is she a sympathetic figure if I take all versions of her and look at her actions objectively

3) very little happened in this story except she drives around, gets an apartment and slowly discovers what her husband did to her finances. This should not have taken three pages.

Oh...and she wept a lot. A LOT.

Home is where the heart is.

But shall these two halves ever come to know that feeling again? I would like to hope so, but neither of them are in a particularly good place right now.

I appreciated the mental health plot which you pursued in this chapter; for all that Leslie has been pleasantly surprised at the welcome, her guilt and gratitude is likely to prevent her from seeking any direct help on the matter. She is going to need Francis to help her see a way clear, yet he's more likely to increase the fragility at this point (resentment his parents involvement). You fear what she might be driven to in the interim, given all the meds.

I think that the characters will find more fulfilment in reconciliation than separation, getting there though...

Looking forward to the next instalment.

Very good writing Carvohi, but the gap between stories is problematic

Causes the reader to go back and forth to get a sense of what happened previously. But did greatly enjoy this installment. I get it, you dont know how to proceed with the story, thus the delay in posting, Maybe just finish the whole thing before posting anymore.

Thx for your efforts.

Never post an unfinished story!

Carvohi,
Take a word of advice. Never post an unfinished story. If you were to look around, you will see many unfinished stories on this site. To not fall into the trap, where you are now, finish the story, no matter where it goes, before posting the first chapter. Then you can post the chapters equal distance apart and keep your reader's attention. This will give you time to check for continuity and plot holes, like you have in this installment. Especially, with an over twenty year marriage. Since once your protagonist goes to court, Sir Francis will be in deep shit! Keeping everything going for six months will work against him, since he did not have a court order allowing him to give her stuff, or the furniture away, or altering her car, insurance, credit cards etc... . He will have to pay for all that and much more. So, in the eyes of the court, he has lost the high ground, and is totally in the wrong, and they will make him pay. It's called status quo, and it must be maintained until the final dissolution is resolved to the courts satisfaction. which might make for good fodder for your next chapter.
Good luck,
Myhands316

to slow

You make us wait and have to review to catch up.
His parents are fools as well as his daughter. They think he ought to forgive,and take the bitch back. The first time she spread for the other guy it was over.

MCPOJim

Don't listen to the asshole annony. Your story is great

gave you a 5

To the anonymous writers...

Many of you have very interesting and worthwhile comments. I don't mind the anonymity, but I would like to reply and get more input, if not for this story than for my next one. You can email me privately.

Another good part...

but as some have pointed out, it is problematic with the breaks taking a long time. For me, since I'm following several story lines on LW, I've got to go back and re-read parts of the last chapter to get me back up to speed on who's who and who did what to whom.

5 *'s

Getting way too complicated

I don't think you can believable transform the evil bitch in part one into a facsimile of a decent human being. It's hard to buy "mother's little helper" taking the blame for this without it having been an obvious problem beforehand.
Actually, it is looking like Francis should divorce his parents and children as well.

It is too slow

The story might be good but it is too slow. Outside of having some other man's baby, I don't remember the other things she did,

That Francis' folks are taking on responsibility for her bodes poorly for....

....their relationship with Francis.
Her casual drug abuse is a serious impediment to her making any real progress on any front.
And most of these characters are just plain weird.
No family loyalties. A daughter that after joining a conspiracy of betrayal against her father believes in any universe that anything will get fixed is simply willfully living a fantasy.
Too many weird things happening. You need to muck out the barn and focus on the core story.

HELLO

Hello...hello...hell...o
I'm sure there's a story here...somewhere
Helloooooooo.

FD45 nailed it in his comments. The wife in this chapter is a total buffoon and a completely differently character to the lying, cunning and manipulative woman from chapter 1. She cheats for who knows how long, shows zero remorse, leaves her husband for another man and 6 months later is shocked to find her credits cards and phone is turned off!

Hubby really has a shit fucking family. Kids knew their mom was a cheating slut and still took her side. The crippled daughter was left to fend for herself while the slut was off fucking her toyboy and its no big deal. The reason she insisted their son is named after her lover is very conveniently forgotten. Now you have his parents plotting and planning to force him back to the druggie slut.

Now your trying to make hubby out to be the bad guy? Because he moved on after she left him for her boytoy for 6 months! And stop acting like you wont make this into a RAAC ending. Your previous work betrays you.

meaningless detail

This story is straight begged down now. Nothing happened that couldn't be adequately conveyed in 2-3 paragraphs. The drugs scapegoat is both too convenient and unbelievable from her character in Pt. 1. This is lazy writing plain and simple, and I strongly dislike where I see it going--no explanation for the gaslighting and other contemptuous behavior apart from her "drug problem" which there is NO WAY she could have hidden for 22 years if she was that far gone. No personal responsibility or character growth here. Finish it off please.

here is a comment you will hate

Your story is meandering... It should have ended two chapters ago...
#epic_fail

I'm sorry but I don't agree with most of the negative comments.....

I love the story and yes she is like a buffoon in this chapter, but that's what happens when you carry around a sewing kit! Her mother taught her how to cope long ago, just stay numb.

And somehow good old Richard Weatherby knew to bring her some candy so she would stay numb! I'm not condoning her cheating and I think Francis needs to exact a little bit of revenge to heal his pride. But should be screw up his whole life because of pride?

If he still loves her, they do counseling and try to get over it. If they can't get over it, then they split for good. But the bottom line is to get her off her dependency to drugs, so she make some competent choices!

the most amazing thing about this story is

that Carvohi REALLY deep down thinks this is a GOOD story. Think about that for a second

there are 2 possibilities.

1 Carvohi KNOWS this is crap but puts it out there anyway just to get folks riled up. In which case is a self centered fucking asshole

2. Carvohi THINKS this is really good ... In which case he is has serious issues.

Gee...

Harry's still talking to me. Somebody turn that damn computer off in the Pentagon. The Pentagon's still in Virginia isn't it?

Harry...I love you man.

I found your story interesting and different from most of what is on Literotica. I also am looking forward to your next installment-I am interested in how you will finally resolve the main characters' differences.

Getting there

Okay, after some confusion I had in part one I now see that this is going somewhere. To the people who complain about stories being too long: too bad. There isn't that much filler and if all you want is a narrow plot line go read someone else. I am looking forward to the next installment of this story. The drug thing is a real issue; I don't know how that'll be dealt with and I agree with others the husband probably should have been aware of drug-induced mood swings. Or maybe he kept her so happy she was fairly clean till the merde hit the fan?

Self aggrandizement aside......

..... I liked it. Please do continue.

Argh leaving me hanging

Congrats. Another great chapter. Four out of five. I have gone from hating Leslie to feeling some sympathy for her. Leslie's suffering is the key to making these stories work. It has to be not too much and not too little. The depth of her drug problem surprises me. I didn't get a hint of that in Chapter 1. Or maybe there was a reference to sudden mood swings that I didn't notice. I will go back and check. I like all the secondary characters. Be careful when flipping from POV to POV. It is a powerful technique for an author but readers need to know clearly whose eyes they are looking through. I got confused at one point in this chapter. Also I admire your confession you don't know where this is going. Cheers Steve

Let me illustrate how mediocre this story has become.

I can move on to chapter 4 and see what happens next, or I can finish this comment, take a shower, and get on with my day. Ahhhh . . ., the water feels wonderful! And your story isn't going anywhere.

Children who condone cheating...

....are not to be tolerated. I was cheated on when my kids were 15 and 16 12, a boy and a girl, respectively. They knew their mother was cheating, yet said nothing. When I caught her and filed for divorce, they were angry with ME for divorcing their mother. Sex was just sex was their argument and I was going overboard because their mother loved me.

All three put the full court press on me. My wife was dismissive, my kids were nasty, saying it was my fault our family was being torn apart. I should , in their words, man up and pull up my big boy pants, otherwise they were going to live with their mother and have nothing to do with me. That was the straw that broke this camels back and when they were at school and my wife at work, I loaded the few things I wanted in the back seat of my old beat up Camary with over 300K miles on it and drove away.

That was 10 years ago. Since that time I've worked in the Gulf of Mexico on oil platforms and banked some, to me, big money. And money made bigger by a great investment firm. I've never remarried, hell, I'm not even sure if I'm married. My old family doesn't know where I am or don't care, either way I am pleased to never see them again. I've bought a small ranch in southern Idaho and as I write this I'm about to fly out there and begin living there full time. Someday I hope to remarry, but since the day I left, I've never even had sex with another woman. No desire nor time to. I work and do little else. Until now, that is!

I understand my wife lives alone, the kids have both married and moved away. My daughter has two kids, grandkids I'll never see. Am I happy? YES.

Re-read

Okay, so my memory lapsed and I got called on it. I went back and re-read from the beginning. I found this:
"Richard was a big help to me back then; he did a lot more than just hold me and love me. The girl he'd been dating before me had some kind of medical problem and she used something called Roliphyl or Rohypnol I think. Richard always had some for me. Before we went out he always made sure I took one; I sort of remember how dreamy they made me feel. Sometimes I'd take two. I wouldn't even remember anything if I took two.
He gave me some more when he came to see me after his wife left him. I still have some in my kit. He gave me a big bottle; they aren't marked so I couldn't say where he got them. "

She was taking the "DATE RAPE" drug willingly? This from a woman who specialized in helping victims of domestic violence? Very confusing or a very stupid woman.

Now she is a drug addict who gets caught DUI

In this chapter she can't make a move without drugs. She needs drugs to get moving and slow down. Francis' parents conspire against him his father can't understand why He can't get over it because of the time that has passed. That time is part of the problem. She abandoned her family and continued her affair with Richard. No one would take her side.

Okay you're just dragging this out

And not in an interesting fashion. Just too much blah, blah, blah that adds nothing to the story.

to anonymous with the 3 kids.

If you even have 3 kids.
I call bs as that story sure sounds it.
and if it is then your old family are far better off without you in their lives

No Change In My Perception

The moment she started popping pills like they were tic tacs, my sympathy register for Leslie bottomed out. I am fully behind the husband. He has not done one thing illegal or underhanded. I tire from women who turn on the sprinklers when things don't go their way. Yes, Richard gave her drugs, but Leslie brought Richard into her marriage. So now...Tough shit. NO SYMPATHY.

Thank you, Carvo, she still has not faced her abject lack of respect for him yet...

But it is good to see something besides the usual BTB stuff .
If I were Francis, I would FEEL betrayed by my parents. My rational mind could see why they were being kind but watching them catch her would really hurt me emotionally, Dang this is getting complex. OldBearSwitch

you were correct,

it is way to long winded to hold a reader's interest

Whiners

Title says it all, except for maybe ungrateful

What she did was ongoing...

With her being stupid enough to not know what drugs she's taking - if we believe that about the Rohypnol - she could be forgiven once... But no way she didn't know what was happening after... "was with a guy, could feel she'd had sex, couldn't remember it, stands to reason the guy was somehow involved in both of those things, should no longer SEE the guy".

For his family to support her is one thing - "You hurt Francis but we still love you..." But to assist her in getting him back - "and we'll gladly put him through more pain to make YOU happy."

Gosh, thanks family... How about instead, "and we're sorry you feel bad but we'll only help you get YOUR shit together, not the two of you together."

Interesting how your stories never delve into anyone finding out HOW hurt the guy was... Because your characters don't really seem to care about THAT. Their primary interest is in making the wife happy again.

I suspect you'd argue they're trying to make the husband happy again too... But why don't they consider that maybe the way to do that is to help him get OVER the cheating wife rather than sucking it up and accepting what they've done...?

It seems the husband will be made to look like the bad guy

And the manipulation continues.

My guess is the husband will have to suck it up. Nothing like having family and friends wanting to drag you through the pain and humiliation again. And I already see the beginnings of blaming him for her behavior: he had young girls following him, etc. Hopefully the story doesn't go down that path.

I hope the "why" is believable. She made a decision to break her vows, lied, and manipulated him. And not just once. It's going to have to be a doozy.