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This has
been one of the most moving stories that I have ever read.Congratulations!!
5 easy stars!
What a great concept, and it worked as well as you hoped!
Thankyou!
(I want to share this with my own mother........)
Meh
i applaud your effort and creativity, but each segment was simply too vague to have any real meaning. Why is she at the podium? Is she on the plane with her husband? Perhaps, but at that age it is not a given. Was hubby still alive when she died?
What A Wonder Piece Of Writing*****
God Bless you for sharing this beautiful story.
Moving and Emotion
Your writing of this woman was both moving and full of emotion. I have yet to find a story that moves me in as few words as this does. The image that each age brings to mind is wonderful. Full of Life!
Nice try. I hope it worked for you.
This read like a writing assignment, and I suspect you would get an "A". But as soon as the pattern and the storyline became obvious, it lost interest. Too little detail to appreciate what was happening, too little emotion to embrace the character, and too little story to make it whole. It was contrived to be evocative, but the explicitness of the contrivance outweighed the emotions being evoked. I think I appreciate what you were trying to do. I wish I could appreciate the story itself.
5 stars
But vague as others have said. Paragraph 4: their what? Their is possessive--THERE is a place when people are There. A "B" if it was an English assignment.
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