Unlikely stuff, poor grammar, stiff writing
You really need an editor.
"he decided to take advantage of this externality" What the hell does this mean? "Does my size intimidate?" Do you speak English or what? "vast penis" What the hell is a vast penis? Get an editor or give up writing. It's up to you.
This is so bad even an editor would not help.
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English
Unbelievable
Unlikely stuff, poor grammar, stiff writing
Semi-literate
You really need an editor.
Whaaa??
"he decided to take advantage of this externality" What the hell does this mean?
"Does my size intimidate?" Do you speak English or what?
"vast penis" What the hell is a vast penis?
Get an editor or give up writing. It's up to you.
dear stupid and raincoat
This is so bad even an editor would not help.
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