had fun with the style of the story, wouldn't have minded hearing more about Kalinas' service. Was fun though. Thankz
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Anonymous07/14/10
wow..... you're an undercover racist, huh?
I've read a few of your stories starting with "Wrong Number" which I thought was very interestingly written. However, those that I've read since that one, all seem to be somewhat racist. It's actually quite disturbing to see how you look at things and portray them with your words. Also, you may want to do a little proof-reading of your material, as well as spell-check before your future submissions.
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Anonymous10/03/11
It was good but...
The style of dialogue made it a little hard to follow. I think if it had been written a bit more like an actual story and less like a script, it would have been easier to read.
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Anonymous06/01/12
good read
really good first chapter hope their will be more to come especially if there are mother and daughters coming in to it would love to read more soon
English
great
We need more stories like this one.
very teasing
had fun with the style of the story, wouldn't have minded hearing more about Kalinas' service. Was fun though. Thankz
wow..... you're an undercover racist, huh?
I've read a few of your stories starting with "Wrong Number" which I thought was very interestingly written. However, those that I've read since that one, all seem to be somewhat racist. It's actually quite disturbing to see how you look at things and portray them with your words. Also, you may want to do a little proof-reading of your material, as well as spell-check before your future submissions.
It was good but...
The style of dialogue made it a little hard to follow. I think if it had been written a bit more like an actual story and less like a script, it would have been easier to read.
good read
really good first chapter hope their will be more to come especially if there are mother and daughters coming in to it would love to read more soon
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