Two Weeks at the Family Reunion

good start

that felt like the first page of a good plot. keep it up so to speak.

Good start,

This was a very good start to what could become a realey hot story. Looking forward to the next installment with anticipation of more family involvement.
With the right penmanship it has the potential of turning into a large family fuck fest.

More please

What happens after supper? Tomorrow? Who else does she fuck?

Is that all there is?

If not, where was the chapter number in the title to warn this wasn't a complete story? Do you care that little about your own story?

Not all there is -- I'm in the process of editing

Thank you all for the positive comments. For the not positive, I care greatly about my writing, which is why I only posted that bit. The other parts were being edited. Relax.

I liked what there was to it, but it felt like a part of a story, rather than one in full.

re: I care greatly about my writing

Ah, so it's the readers you don't give a fuck about, at least not enough to warn them this wasn't a complete story. Gotcha.

re: salty anonymous commenter

I literally posted this on a whim. This is my first story, sorry that I'm not sorry I'm not an expert in sex-writing etiquette. If you're going to be pissy enough to leave nonconstructive shitty comments but cowardly enough not to post your name, feel free to stop reading. I couldn't care less either way. I'm not writing to please you -- I'm doing this for fun.

enough relax

Two weeks one page clearly not a compete story. Give the writer a break and enjoy what is a great start. With so much potential and 13 days to go. I love summer sin.