A Typical Ending

Simply the best. Welcome back

Sorely missed and hope this is a teaser of more to come

I Concur

You have been sorely missed, welcome back! Thank you.

the good, the not so much

The good:
You're back.

The not so much:
This is too short, too little meat on the bones for a good BBQ.

really rushed

I'm hoping there ISN'T more to come of this and you get back to writing good stories again. This was not at all worthy of your talents.

Quik

and to the Point.

Interesting little tidbit. Very glad to see you back writing again.

Cog

Enjoyed it

nice flash tale. Look forward to seeing more. Thanks.

Glad to see you back

But I'm not a big fan of flash stories. By the time I get introduced to the characters it's all over.

Man, when I saw that you posted a new story I broke out a grin. Welcome back to a great author. Looking forward to whatever you decide to post.

oshaw

Nice

Excellent work qhml1!
(even if flash stories ARE the premature ejaculations of the literary world...)
Great to see you back. It's been a wasteland here lately. They're going to change the category to "Wives and the cuck softcocks that love them"

Nice

A quick retrospective of a man and his cheating wife. It doesn't get any better.

Wellcome

Wellcome back ,looking forward to your future writings :)

Great

I liked this story a lot. Other than the assault with the fork, I thought that this was a realistic story. I would suggest taking this type of story one step further. One interesting part of cheating is the betrayed's role int he cheating. Sure, you hear cheaters tell their spouses that it had nothing to do with them, but of course that is a lie. The cheater is not satisfied with marriage and has so little respect for the other person that they cheat. So what is it? The lack of respect? Then why? The lack of love? Then Why? Is the cheater just an arrogant person? Then why did the spouse marry them in the first place? The spouse bears the responsibility for allowing a security threat into their lives, if nothing else. How did that happen? Be honest.

Short, but vintage qhml1

Nice to have anothter story from you. Thanks.

Welcome back

Glad to see you are still a very skillful and entertain author. Thanks for sharing.

Decent

"The bitch is cheating on me, but I don't give a fuck anymore." – The problem is even IF you don’t “care” anymore, you still can’t let her just get away with it!

Flash Story

For those complaining about the length - It's a FLASH story; they are SHORT!

For those who don't like flash stories - We are told at the very beginning it's a flash story, if you don't like flash stories, why read it? Or if you DO read it, don't read it and then complain that it is a flash story.

Your Back!

Glad to see that you are back, I look forward to seeing more stories from you.

Thank You !!!

This is the type of story I come here for !
Thank You Again

Now that's a flash story

For all the authors out there that submit unfinished stories they term as "Flash" - take a look at this one.

Bill1104

glad you're back

I look forward to the quality of your stories on this site. Ignore the negative comments.

Glad too you are back

You were sorely misssed

*****

Classic flash!

You Have Been Missed

Nice to see that you are back. I look forward to reading quality stories again.

5 & FAV For your return

About the story? A good little exercise to shake the rust out! Slightly different style this Narative Descript but enjoyable. BTW Welcome back you were sorely missed!

You have to laugh

Not sure why someone who has never submitted believes he can accuse you of being lazy.
Always a pleasure to read your material.

Welcome Back!

I agree that it is AWESOME to read ANYTHING new from you!
The NICE thing about a flash story exercise, is that it just whets our appitite for more.

I appreciate your "typical ending" theme. The point is even made about the neighbors; they don't think it would happen to them, but it eventually does. Long winded explanations, and details of counseling remain uneccessary. The very point of this story is that with cheating, sometimes you CAN see it coming from a mile away, and yes, you know exactly how it is going to end. So why drag it out? Seems a perfect fit for the flash story format.

Perhaps what I liked the most about this story is what others might NOT have liked. Once he realized that she was drifting away, and had lost respect for him and the marriage, HIS response WAS immediate (even if the confrontation took a while to play itself out). Once respect was lost, it was lost totally on BOTH sides of the equation. His apathy became his defining characteristic. But it was the same for the entire marriage. "You don't care, so why should I? You don't care, so I don't either! You don't respect me, I certainly don't respect you. You don't want to talk about it, then there really isn't anything to talk about, is there."
Now someone rightly might say that if he really loved her than he would have fought for her. Nah. Of course he fell out of love, because SHE fell out FIRST!

If you were to expand this story, it is this destructive apathy that would need to be explored further. The whys of her cheating no so much. But more about the pain of realizing that she had destroyed her marriage, because it was in effect, HER actions that changed him into sombody else. If there were tears, and begging for forgiveness, is there really true remorse? What loss is she feeling? The loss of his love and respect, or the the loss of that limited time in her life where she THOUGHT she could have her cake and eat it too?? The best consequence of his apathy is actually DESTROYING that notion for her. "Yeah, you might be getting fucked elsewhere, but if you were expecting to be coming home to safety , security, and love with me, than you thought WRONG!"

So many times I dislike stories where it seems Hubby WAITS too long to have a confrontation. Oh, he needs to gather evidence, or some such. The really annoying ones are when he has doubts. This guy MIGHT have waited for a confrontation, but he immediately knew what was wrong. His reaction was swift. His feelings DID turn off like the proverbial lightswitch. Oh, it might not have been the best way to handle it, but it does seem like it was better than many portrayed fictionally here in LW Land. He may have had to escape from a broken marriage, but at least he manages to escape without a totally broken heart, and at least his SELF-RESPECT remains intact. The argument could be made that if his heart wasn't broken, then it was because he never fully gave it to her in the first place, and maybe THAT is why she strayed. Maybe, but in this flash story at least, we don't know for sure. But it seems MUCH more likely, that she was never the type of woman who really ever deserved his total unconditional love, or never had fully earned that trust, and it is JUST as likely that they never should have married in at all. The cheating was an inevitable conclusion because she just wasn't the type of woman who could stay faithful. And realizing all of THAT, keeps this "typical ending" actually a fairly happy one!

Thanks Q! Glad you have been feeling better, and can't wait to read more!

Anticipation

Eagerly looking forward to more. This little tale was pretty damn good.

Usually I love this author's work. I only liked this one.
I know that it is only a story - but storing propane cylinders in the basement. Walmart won't even let you bring filled cylinders inside.

A fan speaks

This elegantly crafted little piece is not exactly my taste BUT if the author of Boston to Birmingham and Terrible Taste in Teas intents to continue posting on this site I will eagerly read anything he chooses to write.

All is said in this short one...

All is said in this short one...4*

good

You have to love the prong action!!!!!!!

fun tale

welcome back

We're Glad You're Back!

Poor

violence and sex make a poor story

Nice

No Navy SEALs, no totally over the top revenge, just a realistic ending. Something like I hope I would have done in similar circumstances. Thanks for a nice little flash story. Oh, and welcome back !

WAIT--WATCH---and LISTEN

just like the RR crossing. TK U MLJ LV NV

Okay...and the point of this is...?

I'll put as much effort into this comment as the author put into his story.

5 Stars ! ! !

Loved It !!!

to bad swinger joe

would put the effort of fucking off with his stupid comments, go find your sick writers and comment on them and their garbage.

Good flash story

It was too short. Not because it misses something but because it is a qhml1 story and we want more. ;-)

This isn't a story. But, it will be rated far higher than a lot of stories that a lot of authors put real work into because it appeases the lonely, pathetic old men and the hateful little Internet virgins who make up this section's core demographic these days. This whole category needs to be put out of its misery.

Not really a story....

More like an outline for a story. There is no meat on this bone. Can't give it a grade. Only stories get grades.

I liked it. Seemed to be disjointed but I think that is actually how someone's thought

process would be during that time and with those happenings. And the one that said violence ruined the story, I say that the violence was warranted and actually quite understated compared to what would happen with people I know. I never did live in a close neighborhood where we all partied with each other and so allow spouses to interact with each other in cozy settings. We did however party with work friends of mine and I never saw anyone get out of line with another's spouse, but then most of us were kind of "rough and ready" fellows and most didn't want to chance the hell that would rain down on them most assuredly.

Too short a short story, I like them longer

Okay so what the whole story from both sides and why. What dumb wife goes into the basement to give head ,knowing someone will come down any time. Needed more detail.

Glad

Glad you are back!!

glad to see the little yellow N

looking forward to more.

soon?

Ditto

Glad to see you back. Anxiously awaiting some new substantial offerings. Keep up the great work!

Nice

outline. Would have loved to read the actual story. Maybe next time.

Vanadorn

Vanadorn, you pompous prick, this is how you write a flash story.