Too many continuity errors, especially in ONE sentence every time. For example: "The hill was tall enough to allow us to see the farm sections, which were green already, which had been too wet to plow and had yet to green." I like the work but take more time to proof-read. Don't be one of the the idiots.
I was describing the view from the top of hill where some of the farmland had already been planted and was already green and other sections that had yet to be planted. A fairly typical view of farmland early in the season. I'm sorry if that was unclear. I thought "some of which were green" and "some of which were not yet green" sounded clunky. However, unclear is no less a sin than clunky.
The continuity issue I struggled with the most was that it really should be titled "Spring Hike" but I wanted to loosely hook it up with "Summer Camping."
Thanks for the comment. I appreciate the effort and all the best back at you.
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Too many continuity errors, especially in ONE sentence every time. For example: "The hill was tall enough to allow us to see the farm sections, which were green already, which had been too wet to plow and had yet to green." I like the work but take more time to proof-read. Don't be one of the the idiots.
All the best to you.
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I was describing the view from the top of hill where some of the farmland had already been planted and was already green and other sections that had yet to be planted. A fairly typical view of farmland early in the season. I'm sorry if that was unclear. I thought "some of which were green" and "some of which were not yet green" sounded clunky. However, unclear is no less a sin than clunky.
The continuity issue I struggled with the most was that it really should be titled "Spring Hike" but I wanted to loosely hook it up with "Summer Camping."
Thanks for the comment. I appreciate the effort and all the best back at you.
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