All Comments on 'To Love & Obey Ch. 01'

I liked the plot of the story and it seems to have a very interesting beginning, but PLEASE get an editor or read over your work more carefully as there were a TON of simple spelling mistakes- even using 'hell' for 'bell' in the next to last sentence. Also, this was way too short for this website. Take a little more time to post something longer and more worth our time to click on and read. A normal chapter should be 4 times this length. This was hardly a few paragraphs. I would really like to read your story, so hopefully you will take the time to do it right :)

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I saw this was your first post and i love it! The plot is very interesting and can be set up for an amazing and long series! Great job on your first publish please write more!!

You have a great story. I can't wait to see where what happens.

Please continue. I want to read more.

This is a great beginning. I can't wait to read more. I did find a few misspelled words and if you could make the chapters longer that would be great. Really keep up the good work

Not bad for your first time. Other then needing to fix some errors you have a good basis for this story.

You tagged this story as interracial so please don't forget to give more of a description of how the characters look within the next chapter or two.

Good beginning a little short for me but I'm waiting to read more

Pretty nice, but should be, at the least four times longer, which you can fill in with descriptions, thoughts, and history of the character(s). Good start though, and I'm curious as to how it will pan out.

This wasn't an intro,

or an opening,

"Sunny Rae fled the scene before he could even open his mouth."

So too did the story.

I like it. Please continue. As someone who is an avid reader but has never put pen to paper in the way you have I salute your courage. Well done.

Thank you guys for all of the positive feedback in such a quick time. Also I'm writing this from the notes in my iPhone so I really apologize about it not being a suitable length.

I like it so far. Please keep going.

I look forward to more of the story. Intriguing.

So, people, give the writer a chance for a follow up.

And yes, there was an intro.

Good job so far, keep it up! Enjoying what you've shared with us so far! :)

You either need to proofread your work better or find an editor....there's a ton of typo's in this chapter.

Start! I'm looking forward to see where you take this. Plz keep writing and submitting

Please believe me, people are judgemental and ignorant to be so harsh. If they see fault and cant handle errors, then they need work on comprehensive reading. I love your story please dont stop because peoplecor bullies. How you like that for no editor. I have mistakes, but everyone could understand my comment!! Wonderful story

The story was short but I enjoyed it keep writing love your work

too short for first chapter ,I hope you write more

You should get an editor

I liked it so far not too many editing mistakes but great storyline so far although the chapter is a bit short :D