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My Best Girl Friend

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by LostNConfused1007/12/15

Too Rushed!

Slow down, take time to build the characters more & let the reader become involved into the story before jumping into bed. More powerful if we can associate with the characters instead of just reading about 2 faceless people jumping into the sack together.

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