by bitch2015
this is so stupid. i mean honestly why would you write something like this. you could have at least made her like the guys fucking her instead of making her feel helpless
The story is beyond rushed with a stupid plotline. It doesn't make sense.. I agree with the other comment at least make her like the guys or something... worst story I've read on this site..
The bones of the story are good. Slow down and fill it out. Writing for me is not easy but the end result is good. Do a rewrite.