I dislike leaving negative comments, but I think it helps us grow as writers. Just because it's smut doesn't mean you forget who the characters are. I like that you wrote in third person, I like the actual scene, but I don't care about this character at all.
Just couldn't hold my interest.
I dislike leaving negative comments, but I think it helps us grow as writers. Just because it's smut doesn't mean you forget who the characters are. I like that you wrote in third person, I like the actual scene, but I don't care about this character at all.
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