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Promising
An interesting plot and story well told without the all too often errors of spelling, punctuation and grammar. I limited this to three stars but want to encourage the author to continue writing as I believe, from her biography, she is young and limited in her experience of life - something than can be easily overcome with time. What made the story unrealistic for me, and I suspect many, is the unbelievable resources that any law enforcement agency could devote to the apprehension of a lone stalker and the belief that anyone would have the energy to work an early shift in a busy restaurant before starting in a new full time job in a law office.
Good start:
The story was worth four stars the writing not so much. You show good potential as a storyteller but you need someone to help you with editing or you need to do some very heavy self editing. Good luck.
Thanks For The Read***
After the first story they get much better.Good luck!!
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