They way it's told is unique, the plot from what I can see is unique and much different from a lot of the sludge we get stuck with in the interracial tag! The only thing I would suggest is to up your diction. Obviously you don't have to go digging through the Oxford dictionary for a sixteen character word, but a lot of basic words like "look", "try", "saw", "talk" and "walk" are used pretty liberally.
Otherwise, a solid five stars. Keep up the fantastic work! :)
I'm really glad that you stepped back from immediate sex. Yes, a little short, but that's only because I'm impatient with stories I want to read! keep going, I can't wait to see where this story takes them... x
another 5 star chapter , I love that you didn't just throw sex into the mix to speed things along i enjoyed it much more just reading about them getting to know each other . Cant wait for chapter 3 ! don't leave us waiting to long
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*****
Five.
Excellent
5 stars and I look forward to the next chapter!
Wow! Certainly got my attention!
i am not mad at the shortness because it's so wonderful written. Please don't make us wait in ch.3
A Very Beautiful Story
They way it's told is unique, the plot from what I can see is unique and much different from a lot of the sludge we get stuck with in the interracial tag! The only thing I would suggest is to up your diction. Obviously you don't have to go digging through the Oxford dictionary for a sixteen character word, but a lot of basic words like "look", "try", "saw", "talk" and "walk" are used pretty liberally.
Otherwise, a solid five stars. Keep up the fantastic work! :)
Another good chapter
I'm really glad that you stepped back from immediate sex. Yes, a little short, but that's only because I'm impatient with stories I want to read! keep going, I can't wait to see where this story takes them... x
I wonder if Christina and Stephen realize that things will be worse if they get married. Both will be stuck in marriages they are not happy with.
*slow clap*
another 5 star chapter , I love that you didn't just throw sex into the mix to speed things along i enjoyed it much more just reading about them getting to know each other . Cant wait for chapter 3 ! don't leave us waiting to long
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