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by HoneyAdored07/25/15

Left me wanting for more

I enjoyed this, from the simplicity of the write to the shape, it all worked for me 5ed

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by Anonymous07/30/15

amazed

So fluid, touching, erotic and beautiful. Exquisite.

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by legerdemer03/03/16

A light touch

Piscator, I had not seen this before - you've used such a delicate brush to build the mood and make your points delicately. I feel the middle stanza is a bit rushed. Maybe that doesn't need more words (although the right words could add), only a space between the third and fourth lines, giving it a bit of anticipatory syncopation. So to speak. The last two lines of the last stanza leave me a little sad, a denouement.

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