Love for a Lonely Teacher

Proof read your work!

I am not a spelling, punctuation nazi, but even I have limits. You need to proof read your work before you submit it, better yet find someone to edit. I couldn't finish the story.

Very nice first offering,

even with the faults so kindly pointed out by the non-nazi. Would have liked a bit slower build-up and perhaps a softer,more intimate venue for their long awaited first joining. Overall, a very praise worthy effort. Keep going.

Don't know where to begin...

I hate to be unkind, but your spelling and grammar are so deplorable, it would turn most readers off before they reached the third paragraph. You violate even the most rudimentary rules of the English language. My advice: Get you next piece edited by someone who knows their stuff. Sorry.

I agree with ...

... previous commenters. Yours is a good short story with just enough introductory content to supply the historical context of the players and a [maybe too-] quick sexual climax. But you really do need to find a proof-reader, as many contributors to this forum have done. Your word choice, spelling, and grammatical errors are profound. "C'est la vie!"

sloppy

This is sloppy to the point of disrespect to the readers.

Missing words, extra words, wrong words, punctuation mistakes, etc., errors abound.
There are plenty of volunteer editors and proofreaders available.
Use them.

Fun Read

Unlike previous commentators I didn't let the errors in spelling or grammar prevent me from enjoying your short story. You may contact me for editing or proof reading if you wish. I'm on the Volunteer Editors List. Keep writing!

you would think an english teacher would write better.ok enuff of that crap i suck at grammar and only passed english because of the lit segment.i wll say i liked it but wish it was drawn out for multiple pages or even chapters,as in where do they go from here if at all?

Sorry if you didnt like it, and theres more

Im making this in seperate stories instead of chapters. If you want to follow the story look for Lonely Teacher with me as the author .I like writing and no I didn't use the editors because I proof read it myself twice. Im sorry if you let a little grammer or spell kill the story. To those who like it thanks I hope I dont disappoint you with story2

Use time as an editing tool

It is easy to keep missing things when self editing. Put the story aside for 2 or 3 weeks and then do an edit. Often that will let you see things you might have missed. (No comment on the story as I have not read it).

TR

if you insist

If you insist on doing your own editing and proofreading, then after setting it aside for a few days read it out loud it will help you catch missing and extra words.

Here is an example:
"vanished with a letter our daughter"
Does that make sense?
What or who vanished?

3*

Gave you 3* but have a question do you and the other single page writers that have joined and posted over the last few weeks belong to a group or is it just a huge coincidence? Or just one writer who is a rabid commenter? Sorry that is two questions.

Editing your comment

I'm going to join the chorus of commenters strongly suggesting that you have someone else edit your writing before you submit it to LitE - Or, at minimum, run your work through a spell-checker before you submit it.

As an example of how poor your spelling and grammar skills are, here is your earlier comment, followed by an edited version of it:

===== YOUR COMMENT =====

Sorry if you didnt like it, and theres more

Im making this in seperate stories instead of chapters. If you want to follow the story look for Lonely Teacher with me as the author .I like writing and no I didn't use the editors because I proof read it myself twice. Im sorry if you let a little grammer or spell kill the story. To those who like it thanks I hope I dont disappoint you with story2


===== AN EDITED VERSION OF YOUR COMMENT =====

(Note: Corrected words are in ALL CAPS)

Sorry if you DIDN'T like it, and THERE'S more

I'M making this in SEPARATE stories instead of chapters. If you want to follow the story look for "Lonely Teacher" with me as the author. I like writing and no, I didn't use the editors because I PROOFREAD it myself - twice. I'M sorry if you let a little [poor] GRAMMAR or SPELLING kill the story. To those who like it: Thanks, I hope I DON'T disappoint you with story2.

===== ADDITIONAL COMMENTS =====

That's roughly ten misspelled or incorrectly-punctuated words out of roughly seventy, total!

Do you honestly think that one incorrect word out of every seven is acceptable? And yes, I understand that it was merely a comment and so, might not be subject to the same degree of scrutiny that a published story would be, but I'd wager that there are few sentences - let alone paragraphs - in your story which are free from such errors.

Please understand that I would not have taken the time and effort to key all of this in if I thought that your writing was bad beyond redemption. Actually, I think that your writing shows promise - But you need to work on some things, the first of which is to correct spelling and grammar errors BEFORE submitting your work,

-Rei

Editing...again

The story is OK, but the lack of editing is a serious drawback, especially when it is about two English teachers. Literotica is about literature, even if it is generally focused on the erotic. As such, it is wise to wait for submission until you have thoroughly checked you work. Good luck!

I Loved It*****

Great story I hope this is a series. Thanks for sharing. I know my comment need editing but who cares. I understand it and that is all the matters to me.

So Many...

Of these stories in this section have the potential to be really good stories, and then
they turn into just short little jerk-off stories. And I hate that. I know this is an
"erotic story" site, but I really like the stories that go beyond just the sex and get
into the emotion of a relationship.
Maybe I'm in the wrong section, but I've read a lot of stories here in this section
that don't rely on just the sex scenes to sell the story. I wish more of them were
like that.