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Strange yes, sexy no.
Poorly conceived and badly told. Get an editor. Then get a better story line.
Well
I'll read the next chapter!
Good start
You have made a good start with your story. Do not be discouraged ! Keep on writing, and let us see where you take us. have a nice day.
i liked it
cant wait for the next chapter xxx nicely detailed and started
very soon!
How long is very soon? =)
I like the storyline
I liked the writing style and I'm looking forward to more chapters! :)
Great intro
You're off to a great start! Now on to the next chapter...
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